thanks so much for seperating the chapters! It's way easier to read now. And it's amazing! keep up the writing! :)

still great! I want to read more!

I swear to god you enjoy tormenting your characters... Though don't we all? One question does come in mind though...

Anyway, I will withhold any comment for the time being, till next chapter...

lol :) I like the end... Could you please seperate the paragraphs though? It's hard to read when it all the sentences are so close together... but I do like it :) It's amusing lol

I like this story a lot! Though I think you should make the paragraphs smaller and less jumbled so reading it can be easier. That way no one will accidentally skip a line or two. Other than that though, awesome. The last part, as cliche as it is, did make me laugh. Can't wait for more!