Reviews for Tsubasa: Karakuri no Unmei
Vernelley chapter 8 . 11/1/2009
I like this chapter too...

Just a question about the title...

I'm not trying to say I know more than you or anything, but I thought it would've been "Unmei no Karakuri"...

Unless you were trying to say "The Destiny of Mechanism"?

Sorry...
Animate84 chapter 8 . 10/28/2009
Oh no! R.I.P Tomoe (if he is dead, hope not)

Another great attempt.

Only Criticism: The pair seem a little too happy at the end considering they have lost a friend.

What twists and surprises are in store. That I like to find out.
Vernelley chapter 7 . 10/26/2009
Wow! This is great, I really like it. Can't wait for the next chapter. :)
Vernelley chapter 1 . 10/26/2009
Sounds like an interesting story you've got here. I like it so far. :)
Animate84 chapter 7 . 10/24/2009
Aw! Sweet.

Tsubasa & Hiei remind me of several anime/manga couples. And I'm keen to know more of their relationship as it grows.

Very good stuff. Glad it's being updated rather than forgotten which sadly affects some of the interesting stories here.

I'll add you in since you as a highly-imaginative writer deserve that.
Animate84 chapter 1 . 7/24/2009
A few things to say from Animate84:

1. Nice title with both jap/ eng meaning. The story sounds appetising as well. So top marks for both.

2. A stereotype has been broken. Instead of a doctor/creator with bad/miliatary intentions and a good-mannered assistant, you switch roles, which makes them as characters much more fresh and original. Hats off to that!

P.S. I sense some jealously brewing within the assistant or that's just me.

3. Finally, what is also fresh, is a android/robotic being with a conscience the moment it became activated. Not a lot of them I know off. I like to see how Tsubasa develops from there.

One thing I love about reading others's works is the amazing creativity/imagination all thrown in. So if you feel you could carry on, then go for it. I still need to take my own advice.

Well done and hope more will be on the way.