|Reviews for beautiful insomniac|
| Nero Wolfe chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
Love this powerful piece.
| GinzzzRoxxx chapter 1 . 4/20/2010
This is amazing. Every time I read it.
| Nyx Muses chapter 1 . 4/9/2010
Gripping. Chilling. Awakening. All at once.
It makes you think, and that in itself, makes it a success.
Till the next time,
| Andrea A chapter 1 . 3/19/2010
...Wow. Just, wow. I can't get over how skilled you are. If I only had your talent, I'd become all angsty but beautiful in a Moleskine notebook or something! Please, write as much as you can. :D
| Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 1 . 2/14/2010
Herro there. New reviewer here who happened to get here via your reviews on Narq's story. :) Okay, basically this poem seems pretty deep to me in terms of it's meaning. However I like the way you made this one out to be heavily linked to life in general. In fact I do think that this work could be fitted into the fantasy genre as well due to certain words being used here. Also I like the way you played around with the words usage. Really gave this work a deeper feel in this aspect. :)
P.S: If you're wanting to return this review, then return it via The Eternal Grail. :)
| fairies and snapple chapter 1 . 2/14/2010
I love this. It's just so beautifully written, and the way you combine words is so... euphonious, I think, is the word. Lovely.
| Acaylee chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
This is so lovely! You're an amazing writer. (:
| candii-apple chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
This is amazing. You are amazing. This poem just took my breath away. Please write more :)
| Wonwordful chapter 1 . 1/19/2010
Hi CuriousContradiction, I came back to review the poem like I typed I would... :) I still don't get the "burn for me" part though...
I found it quite challenging to understand, but I'm thinking it was musings on reality, with an insomniac as the narrating device. The fleeting lives of people ("for we are all electricity and/adrenaline and pounding hearts and quick pulses/throbbing like raw paper cuts") and the way we close one eye to the negativity around us to feel that fleeting, meaningless happiness. I hope I got it right... It was a really deep, quite dark poem, and the words are beautifully woven together; the structure, the words, the brackets...It's also very unique and original - I've never seen expressions like "icarus-complexes" and I can tell you're a creative and deep thinker, not to mention well-read. It was a really special poem. I really like it.
| Shy Smile chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
I just decided to take a look at your profile to see if you had any other stories (since I love 'Maybe' so much), and I am so impressed. This is beyond words. It's just...wow... I love it, and I LOVE your writing! You are simply amazing!
I love how you can literally feel the deep emotions in this. I have got to say that everything I read by you takes my breath away, and I can only hope I will get to read more.
| cherise.cat chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
I love the poem and all your poetic-ness in your stories! I want to copy so many of your lines but don't because i can't choose which one to copy and it's plagiarism. Please write more heart-toughing lines that make me smile because of it's wonderfulness.
| Narq chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
Wow, this is such a great poem on many levels.
Whilst reading, the brakets provide different pathways for readers and it means totally different things.
For the eye, it presents a nice, well tidied piece which isn't at all regular, like normal poetry, but it is pleasing, and immediately you feel like you're talking from two POVs.
| Cinnia Aine chapter 1 . 11/2/2009
I really have no words to describe how... perfect this poem is. It's amazing. I love the double meanings and the style of it, how the poem is almost taunting in some ways. The wording fits it fantastically. I think my favorite lines are
"because you’re addictive like those
liquid dares in a glass you swallow to
reli(e)ve your pain and free(ze) yourself",
"and i laugh sardonically- dark january sarcasm- because
you think you’re invincible, but boy,
i can possess you like a shadow",
"plunging your fears in reckless chaos,
and secrets laced with poison",
"where dreams are made of black holes and chaos, not stardust", and
"hope is only a drug for hypocritical cynics." Those lines seem to stand out the most to me and are the most meaningful. The poem is flawless, in my eyes.
| Star Dot Storm chapter 1 . 10/27/2009
Inspiring. Beautiful. It's grace, it's raw truth.
Your writing takes people to a new level, whether it scares them or it enlightens them.
You have an amazing gift, and I love that you aren't afraid to write what we all know, but are too scared to face.
~Star Dot Storm
| AngelaRochelle chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
Whoa. I clicked on this thinking it would just be another of the thousands of poems that fill FictionPress, but I guess you proved me wrong. During the time I read it, I was never left behind due to confusing writing, and the figurative language was so there. Your imagery...it was perfect. And your vocabulary was astounding! It wasn't like all of your words were particularly large ones, but they were all so unique and uncommon, and when someone takes so many atypically used words and puts them together, they seem to lock into place. You put beautiful words together. XD Furthermore, with both this imagery and vocab, you managed to incorporate so much feeling/emotion into the entire poem.
Wow. I really, really mean it when I say this poem is awesome and awesome and awesome. I don't even have the right word for it. 'Awesome' hardly does it justice.
Amazing job and good luck writing!