|Reviews for Soul Asylum|
| chocol8 can kill chapter 3 . 12/31/2009
so far i like the plot! there is magic and some angst, i really like that kind of stories. i'll try to beta read next time so i can help too. update soon!
| chocol8 can kill chapter 2 . 12/31/2009
exciting! head on for the next chapter
| chocol8 can kill chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
wow! i will totally would love this one. i'll subscribe!..
| Kasai Hane chapter 3 . 9/12/2009
Cool! There are a couple of spelling mistakes in this one, but despite that I liked this one.
Write more when you can!
| AlreadyGone chapter 3 . 9/12/2009
ooh! ooh! ooh! ooh! SUSPENSE!
This is pretty cool. I like it ]
You should definately update soon! I need to know what happens! D
| Light at the end of a tunnel chapter 2 . 7/31/2009
cool cool cool! she escaped! thank goodness. thanks for updating!
| unknown chapter 2 . 7/30/2009
i caught a few mistakes while reading this, but otherwise this is very well done.
| Kim chapter 1 . 7/30/2009
It's a nice story/chapter. The Myria girl seems like a nice person though.
| AlreadyGone chapter 2 . 7/30/2009
I think that was pretty cool ]
I wish I could do that! ] ] ]
Update soon please!
(btw, I got your PM and I'll get back to you in a minute ])
| Tihaq Klee chapter 2 . 7/29/2009
I like the plot so far, very interesting. Keep going!
| someone chapter 2 . 7/29/2009
omg i love it. ur a really good writer
| dancin-in-the-rain chapter 2 . 7/29/2009
Alright, so before I get to the good stuff, I'm going to be picky. ;)
Throughout the whole chapter, you don't capatilize the letter 'I' when talking about her from her own narrative. For example: "i* wondered why my family didn't just come into my room to see me. But then i* remembered that my mom would probably yell at me for having such a germ infested room."
It's all sprinkled throughout the chapter, so that was just something I noticed.
And another thing; this sentence really didn't make sense. I caught on, but maybe you should fix it: "My father was a fat jerk with black hair e had black hair and dull green eyes."
But, other than that, everything was flawless! And those were just tiny mistypes.
About the story:
I literally blanched when her mother called her a 'thing'. How TERRIBLE!
And, gah, that wasn't a sucky ending.
I think it was an excellent place to stop; except for the fact that now, I want MORE!
Please, please; update soon!
All the best,
| fanfictiontastic chapter 1 . 7/29/2009
Hee hee, i dont have an account on this website, but anyways, im fanfictiontastic, lol.
Anyways, that was very suspenseful and exciting! It was ah-mazing. Oh wait, this isnt the clique so i probably shouldn't say that. Anyways, that was AMAZING, so update soon!
| dancin-in-the-rain chapter 1 . 7/27/2009
I sent my review reply before checking out your stuff, so then I was all, 'O dang. She only has one story. Well, it makes things easy!'
Alright, so, eh, how can I put this...
I'm sitting on the edge of my seat.
You've gotten me thoroughly in tune with the narrator, and it's only the prologue.
All the best,
| AlreadyGone chapter 1 . 7/27/2009
I like this, you should definitely write more to this.
I've changed my mind. How about we co-write the re-written version of Traitor Sacrifice? Would you be interested in doing that? I like your style of writing ]
Let me know alright?