Bringing out a sequel so soon? Oh well. Get a heads up on what's to happen even if it is obvious. Love your characters. again. Kale is the innocent princess that wants to help the poor. Seth is the almighty Savior that everyone loves. Kale's going to develop a big crush on him isn't she?

lol the escaping the attentions of various self-obsessed young men who only wanted to acquire the power of the Empire. Are you going to put a scene of that along the story?

I love the fact that she left her dress on. That shows character flaws on not thinking things throughly. ALso that maybe she was so eager to help that she forgot about it.

One thing that I don't like about her is that she should know how to fight. Even if it's just a little. She's a princess which means that there are assasins sent after her and she should've been taught how to defend herself if there was ever a time where no help was availble. I just wished she could have done something. Sorry if you take any offense in me saying that. :P. She did struggle so that does count.

Ha ha. Like how the guy who leered at her took a while to realize that he just got stabbed. It's like, 'what's this? oh, it's a blade. What's it doing here. Oh. I just got stabbed and it hurts!'

The guards having dirty mids was funny. It gave them personality and an air or spritness.

Love your stories.

~BeBeEllis