Reviews for Lysandra
Chuck chapter 21 . 1/1/2011
No, no, no. You have to tell us whether Blaze and Lysandra have a happy ending. There was no indication as to whether they persue an actual romantic relationship. Sequel? Please?
FictionistaKarla chapter 2 . 2/10/2010
Interesting... Although we didn't see Zack's physical description. Neither Blaze's.

Good work. I liked the twist at the end of this chapter. I get the institutional feeling on the description of the place and schedule, food, etc.

FictionistaKarla chapter 1 . 2/10/2010
Interesting premise. Well written story.

The details you have given us at this point intrigue me.

I am definitely curious about various things, the aunt, Blaze, Lysandra's visions, and the mental institute.

But most of all, the beginning.

Evangeline Donovan chapter 21 . 1/23/2010
I adored the story. I felt about the same as Lysandra when my cousin died: sad, and still holding on to him. Don't delet this story, as it is very good. It would be interesting to read this story from a darker, more gothic view as well, but don't delete this version.
NoHornCorn chapter 1 . 12/11/2009
Oh my god this story was so good! i loved it!
Yael Itamar chapter 4 . 10/16/2009
I don't find it at all believable that Lysandra has known Blaze for only three days and has such trust in him. "It's just a feeling" is a terrible justification for this. (I find it impossible to believe that she was curious enough to ask him what was wrong with him, but isn't even curious enough to ask him who he killed or why he did it.)
Fay Diablo chapter 4 . 9/19/2009
"and a second thought she corrected him." -This doesn't make sense...

"He shot her a dangerous look, as if for daring to correct her" -I think you change the gender of the Warden here...

And I don't think he would call them "bad ways". A more eloquent synonym to "bad", maybe...

This is really good...I think I'm gonna nominate this for FPSSA...
Fay Diablo chapter 2 . 9/18/2009
I liked this chapter, too...Blaze seems...interesting...

It seems like there should be a bit more build-up, though, maybe, with that whole 'he's-really-a-creepy-pervert' thing...I dunno...
Fay Diablo chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
This is brilliant...You are a refreshingly skilled writer, and this seems very interesting...
Yael Itamar chapter 2 . 9/17/2009
If you're going to write about characters with psychological conditions, make sure you do a lot of research on those conditions. For example, most people think schizophrenia is only about hallucinating, but it's actually much more complex than that.

I think you can do much more to build up character development in both Blaze and Zach.

And it's hard for me to believe that people in a mental institution would be allowed to wander off by themselves, particularly if they were dangerous like Zach.
Kameko Sakka chapter 3 . 8/20/2009
really enjoying this so far and can't wait to read what happens next.
Yael Itamar chapter 1 . 8/2/2009
I like this. I'd be interested in reading more.