Reviews for Adventures in Teenaged Angst! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Well school uniforms are hot and cute no matter what, but I can see how what Z's wearing isn't flattering at all. Actually, right after my comment on the first chapter, I went to your page and saw the pic you have for Z...yep cute as hell. Hum...so Draven knows that Z's a guy lol awesome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well Z sounds really cute! lol I would love to meet her! I'm going to keep reading. I like this so far! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow this story is really good! i cant wait for the next chapter! you have officially gained a new anxious fan! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know have mnore thn just one anxious fan so keep the chapters comin :) I love this story, its quite awesome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was drawn to this thinking it was a parody or a comedy or something like that. I didn't expect to get what I feared: an offending, unfunny story. The problem is that it really tries to tell a serious story and be for laughs at the same time, a combination that doesn't go great together. In the end, you just get an incredibly offensive male transgendere stereotype who tries to pull us in with his quirks, which don't sound funny or interesting. Some of the things he says-or most of them (like his appearance)-don't belong in a journal that he mentioned in the very beginning of the story was meant as a way to vent his feelings. It feels more like a narrative piece where the character automatically has to mention his appearance and how different it is from everyone else, rather than it coming out naturally in the story. The second chapter really disturbed me, as I really don't know who I was suppsed to feel sorry for: this "Z" who sounds like a Valley Girl in all of his offensiveness, or his parents for forcing him to wear girl clothes because the mother couldn't handle the fact that she has a son for a child. I'm sorry to say that two chapters did it for me. Perhaps if you want to imrpove on your work, make believeable characters and believable scenarios. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes, that was very nice and was long enough. Awesomer fanfic. Keep on writing and let no one keep you down in your writing ability. Sorry, I had to keep this short but it's late so TTFN! And keep on writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() YAY! You updated and sorry about the time it took me to review, exams are on and I have to do like what...19 or so exams and study for all so I don't have much time on my hands but anyhoo...why doesn't Miki just keep her grubby lil'hands off the guy...please, like he wants her...I mean come on HE'S GAY for pity's sake! Oh this is an awesome story or diary/journal/Book thingie whatever you call it...but her - I mean - HIS journal entries could be a bit longer...it just doesn't give the story enough substance. So only one complaint the short chappies but either way awesome story and loving every word of it so far...fabulous grammar, I would complain about your sentence structure and usage but it's journal entry, watcha gonna do? So awesome story, as I have said before, and I know your referring to me...hehe...so please update soon! Your anxious fan is STILL very much anxious! UPDATE SOON! AWESOME STORY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOL! This is a super funny story and I like it so far...I thought this story was gonna be some drabble about a super cute girl and her even SUPER awesome life, which is extremely cliched...but really never saw this coming! SHE IS A HE!Well, well, well, I've certainly heard and seen a lot of things in my life...but this...this is a first...I like this story SO much because it's an original and it's a creative idea to base a story on...so please update soon...k...I think this story is awesome and just remember you have one more anxious fan waiting! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, I totally wasn't expecting the ending of this chapter. I like how open and expressive this is though. Keep going! |