|Reviews for If I'm To Become a Whale|
| I'm just a dreamer chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
lol. I like this, no, i love this :) and two reasons only, I LOVE WHALES, I LOVE YOUR WRITING :) also i wouldn't mind being a whale either, and i wish that every single person in the world that has a connection to the slaughter of whales should realize what it'd be like to be a whale, and would they want to be harpooned and cut up like meat, sorry, this is what i feel strongly about and your work about whales inspires me, i haven't read anything about whales on this site so far and then i found this :) thank you, i have a poem against whaling on my profile if you care to read it, i'm just a dreamer
| give me november chapter 1 . 10/5/2009
thank you for this wonderful and very humorous poem. i enjoyed it quite a bit. check out my own stuff, maybe a few of them might make you laugh!:)
| Shagg chapter 1 . 9/11/2009
I adore this.
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
This is a fascinating piece - first the idea of switching from human to whale is not a common one, way to go for originality.
You have emphasis on the pelvis - or losing the pelvis, losing the ability to walk, be mobile. Yet you seem immersed with the ideal of the ocean, swimming, becoming one with the salt, making a new kind of piece there.
Throughout the whole piece I felt the transcendence of being torn between both words. And I loved the little line about the penis, it’s humorous, fits, and factual - which is a hard combination to pull off. All in all this piece really made me think, it has a unique edge to it that I’ve not seen before .Keep up the good work.
Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)
| TinuvielDork chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
I won't lie, I clicked on this poem because the title/summary intrigued me. And I've also been semi in love with whales ever since reading a novel called "Whale Talk" which, while having very little to do with whales, did have a character wish he could be a whale because of their ability to communicate with so many other whales, and to have their emotions resonate across oceans. And I think it's interesting how that feeling in the novel came across in your poem as well, but in a different way.
I rather like how you seem to be saying that you can currently only speak via your body. Can't communicate what you want to how people usually try to communicate. And the opposites of the whales' abilities - be naked, be comfortable with themselves, but shield their ability to cry from others and even from themselves? Would the whale want to hide the fact that he was crying from himself?
Basically, I very much enjoyed your poem. Sorry my review has been so ramble-y.
| in theory chapter 1 . 8/22/2009
I think of 'pelvis' as such a feminine word, it imprinted on me a distinct sense of sexuality in this. I loved it, and whales are still fascinating.
| sharks don't sleep chapter 1 . 8/18/2009
My favorite is the second stanza - from heavier than hearts to the crying/salt part? Ohh my god, that was beautiful.
| Andrea Lotte chapter 1 . 8/12/2009
Great poem, interesting subject matter. I especially enjoyed the second stanza. However, I feel that the word "communicate" in the third verse sounds a little awkward compared to the rest of the poem, which has a nice fluidity.
Interesting poem, nevertheless! Nice work
| lionattack chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
I hope you keep writing about whales :) This is fantastic, and artfully written. I love the way the mood is set, and the subtle longing, only to be wildly (and hilariously) shifted. It doesn't take itself too seriously, and I really love that quality in a poem. We are never hit over the head with the uncertainity of the speaker's place in the world, but we can feel it, and that's what makes this poem interesting and effective. And I love the speaker weighing the pros and cons of becoming a whale. I really enjoyed this! Well done!
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
This is really interesting.
(in a good way)
| Isca chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
I do believe that this is the first whale-based poem that I've ever read - it made for a very interesting and entertaining read. I love the repetition of the line, "I have to lose my pelvis," because the speaker suggests that she has to lose her sexuality in order to gain a better appreciation for music, communication, breathing, etc. The line, "Could be at home with nakedness," was also a favourite of mine, as it was quite moving and striking. Keep up the great work. :)
| speakeasy-love chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
wow. this is a really amazing poem.
thanks ofr sharing it with us.
| Scarlet Child chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
I've missed reading your work! I like this a lot, especially "however. I could be heavier than hearts, could never need an umbrella again. Could be at home with nakedness. finally be deep. get along with salt." :)
| for shame chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
i love this - a lot.
there is something poetic about the first few lines, despite the usual vulgarity associated with sex.
i was coaxed into such a melancholy mood by the line "never know if I was crying". and then... you mentioned whale penises.
i loved that; made me laugh out loud.
& i love the connection between getting beached and getting stuck. and everything else following it.
well, basically everything.
this is the funniest - and yet most (strangely) poetic - poem i've read in a long time.
| pangur chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
Nifty. I enjoy this subject matter.