|Reviews for Ice|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/7/2009
Sorry I'm so far behind on my alerts!
This is screaming for punctuations. You ask questions without question marks. It's confusing.
"I know what I felt"... that seemed forced for the rhyme because the rest of the piece is in present tense.
I like the piece though. The questions you ask are powerful and I really love the last two lines because it's not like a good/bad comparison. Both would kill the ice.
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| XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
This is very nice.. My favorite line
'If I kiss death
Will you be mine'
very cute. nice job!
| KelaBelle chapter 1 . 8/4/2009