This was pretty good, but there were a few times that you broke the rhyme scheme, which made it a little choppy, like here...

In the one that I see, there’s a sweet sour sort

In this one is a small cinnamon heart

Still though, the poem was pretty good. It was a different and interesting read. God Bless!

Hmm, well overall in general this was an okay written piece but if I had to break it down line by line, it wasn't that great. The rhyming was alright at some parts but at others, it felt really forced. Also, you started off with basically perfect rhymes but towards the end you started to use slant rhymes and that disrupted the flow a lot. As for the actual content of this piece, I found that some lines were really juvenile in comparison to the others. For example, the second one. It just sounded like you were trying to think of a sentence that ended in a rhyme to "head" even though it didn't really fit with the rest of the piece.