|Reviews for Freefalling Fun!|
| Sanareth chapter 1 . 10/18/2010
Methinks that soon the man
Whose name a secret will remain,
Shall be be coming into land
Listening to the wind's refrain.
And I do not doubt
He'll be ready to shout
When he finds that gravity
doesn't tolerate levity
Don't flap your arm's
or Try to fly
Don't raise any alarm's
You may not die.
But either way,
You'll find out today
'cos Gravity brooks no delay
and Help isn't on the way
A hastily Written reply, good work with the original.
| Dante's Disciple chapter 1 . 3/28/2010
Nice little poem, snappy rhymes make me smile :)
Hope the dive went well btw!
| SubtlePoison chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
good luck. i've always wanted to jump out of a plane... looks like fun...
| fatbird33 chapter 1 . 8/7/2009
i have to be honest with you; i thought it was corny and weird. The first two stanzas you used the wrong plane twice. and the rhyming was really forced, i don't know if that was supposed to make it funny?
however i did like the last line, that part actually made me smile, cause it's kind of sarcastic and such.
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