Reviews for Shades of Gray
clay-heart chapter 4 . 9/27/2009
Hmm. I like this chapter a lot (Mikhail is really coming along, and Nadia's getting interesting too). It looks like you may have been abducted by the fall semester too, but I hope you get the chance to update sometime soon! I enjoy this story, and it would be a shame to never get to read the rest of it.

I don't really notice any major problems (same old stuff with "to be" verbs), but it would be kind of nice if your chapters were a bit longer.

Nice job! I can't wait to find out more about Ares! )
Caecilia chapter 4 . 8/23/2009
[“Were they going to turn me? Eat me? Groom me?” ] bwahahhaa... Groom him... The image that popped up with that made me have to pause to get the laughter out before reading on. XD

[The stars were calm, peaceful. No longer twinkling about, the once glittering balls of gas were now content as static spectators, overseeing worlds encompassed by the infinite universe. Stalks of grass waved haphazardly as wind swirled the field they stood in] I absolutely LOVE the imagery there. Beautiful )

[Her stereo system boomed loudly enough to tickle her skin.] The only real way to listen to music x

Oh, this is getting really good. I am really starting to like this more and more. Can't wait for the next chapter and see where you'll take this.

Really like how you introduced the relationship (or lack-thereof) between Kent and Nadia.

Great job! )

~Cae, The Roadhouse
Caecilia chapter 3 . 8/23/2009
[black 789 Chevy] ZOMG. Yummy car x

Shouldn't 'base' be capitalized? 0.o

I mean, it's not 'the base' it's just base, as in a name...

O... Now I'm getting more and more into this. I'm really getting interested with Nadia, especially. I mean, Mikhail is interesting and all, but Nadia... She protects him, but she obviously has a bit of darkness to herself as well...

Can't wait to read the next chapter, Nor. You're doing a great job!

~Cae, Roadhouse
Caecilia chapter 2 . 8/23/2009
[Dread swallowed him whole, taking no time to chew] I love that line! D

[English class to tears when speaking on the shameless killing of insects] Okay, things dying is bad, but when I read that I kinda cracked up. Now that is someone that I would LOVE to hear speak x

[“And don’t mock my accent boy!”] I would put a comma after 'accent'

[“Ok, ok everyone. Settle down please,”] replace the comma after 'please' with a period, and put a comma after 'down'

[and at that point he was certain awkward meeting had a far greater purpose.] It kinda seems like this sentence is missing a word to me, or something. 'he was certain awkward meeting' just does not read right to me. 0.o

maybe 'this awkward meeting' or something? 0.o

[Nadia grimaced as the vampire leapt into the air] So she refers to him as a vampire, but when Mikhail thinks about him, he says he's clearly not human. Introducing he's a vampire without giving other evidence to suggest it? 0.o

Just my opinion, but I think you should change that line x

Other than those small things, I really liked this chapter. Looking forward to reading the next! Good job )

~Cae, Roadhouse
Caecilia chapter 1 . 8/23/2009
So, before I start on actually reviewing your story, I have to let you know that I absolutely love the name Mikhail, and that's one of the reasons that I wanted to read your story, other than it sounded cool, too x

And I've never seen Clair spelled that way. Normally it's spelled with an 'e' on the end. What made you change it? 0.o

[“Mikhail, get it together son,” she snapped.] I would replace that comma with a period, and put a comma after 'together' (even though she continues to talk after the next period)

[toxic waste suits] I think referring to them as biohazard suits makes more sense...

[DNA tests. There were bite marks on some of them.”] Unless it's specified that there were human bite marks, it doesn't make much sense to do DNA testing... Unless they're testing for the type of animal it is? Do they do that? 0.o

Seems like a pretty good start to a story so far... There wasn't much of a hook for me, personally, to continue reading... But, I'm gonna keep reading, because I have a feeling I'll become more interested in this. Kudos on good spelling and grammar. Nothing kills a story faster than the writing itself being flawed x

~Caecilia Bellz, the Roadhouse
Angel-Leigh Jones chapter 4 . 8/23/2009

another good chapter, i love the discription. The last bit was a bit confusing but i guess i will find out where he fits in, in the next chapter.

Well done :)

Angel-Leigh Jones chapter 3 . 8/23/2009

hm interesting. is she helping him or not. could be a trap.

great writing.

Angel-Leigh Jones chapter 2 . 8/23/2009

wow so two different kinds want him. One vampire and i'm not sure if the other kind is looking out for him or want him for something else.

You have me hooked.

Angel-Leigh Jones chapter 1 . 8/23/2009

wow interesting first chapter. Really well written and it captures your attention. Mikhail is most likely going to be pulled into something, he seems to be looking for adventure.

Great chapter.

Angel - from the roadhouse :)
TymCon chapter 4 . 8/21/2009
Okay the last scene was good, the sociolites always dies first:P well truckers too i guess:P
TymCon chapter 3 . 8/21/2009
Jesus, nadias messed up! Okay wonder whats up whit the vampires, not attacking like, Very good chapter!
TymCon chapter 2 . 8/21/2009
Wow this is good:P the black thendral thing was cool, and nadia seems interesting:) youre writing is very good. Wonder why he's afraid of amar
TymCon chapter 1 . 8/21/2009
Now this was interesting:P i like youre charachters, there very interesting:) omg seven deer heads:O a car accident, wat ran them down,a homicidal weed wacker?:P
N.M.R chapter 3 . 8/20/2009
Now, one little note. I really enjoy your writing but I feel it's a bit choppy.

I think these little sections in the chapters are great on their own but if you could find a better way to transition them rather than just a '#' that would be great. Perhaps, through a linking thought by Mikhail? (LOVE THAT NAME, AS WELL!)
N.M.R chapter 4 . 8/20/2009
Oh, this is a great!

I love your writing and the method in which you describe settings. It's lovely. :)
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