Reviews for Masque Voiler |
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![]() ![]() ![]() So... I've just finished the last part of the story and I must say I enjoyed it. In fact at certain parts I was actually laughing out loud and my mother told me to shut up. You're writing style is well structured and despite the spelling errors that you willing admitted to in your first A/N I'd have to say that your story is well written. Your characters have some depth to them and the interactions the two of them have together seem real. Although the coach was a little creepy... Just saying. Anyways... Keep it up please. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol, my old school calls it "ISP" AKA "In School Prison" XP |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter is shorter than the rest, but still good.. Love your story, love your charecters, love you.. Bye |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this. It's wonderful, amazing, hell, I can't even describe the damn thing. I keep imagining Jordon as this hot kid named Eddie who rides my bus. Anyway, it's an excellent story, and I'll be expecting an update soon. I stayed up until 2:20 in the morning for this, so if the next chapter doesn't appear soon I'm gonna be megapissed and track you down! I suggest you take that seriously. Dun be hatin' on mah mad ninja skillz. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hell yes, update! this chapter was very interesting, specially when jordon's father caught them making out. there isn't a worst way to know he's gay... okay, there is, if he caught his son having sex, BUT! I think his father would accept that jordon's gay if he caught him in such a compromising position :p davie is such a funny character! he's young and he's the typical younger brother, I actually haven't seen many kids like him in stories but I always like it when they appear, people should add little brothers to their fics more often... I can't wait for the dance part! not to mention, my curiosity is killing me, I want to see how jordon looks like in those pants! are they as tight as he says or is he just imagining it? ku ku ku... Please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That's right. You show them how well you can cook. Geh, I hate people who are unnecessarily rude by assuming things about what you can or cannot do. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uh oh! How did David take the news that his son has a boyfriend? |
![]() ![]() ![]() keep the updates coming . love this story ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fun story. I like the interactions between the two main characters and I love Skye's attitude. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It feels like I can see everything through Skyler's eyes. And I love the way he thinks. As far as I can tell for someone without spell check your grammar and spelling are pretty damn impressive. Any mistakes you may have made are so minimal I didn't notice them, and believe me, I'm a freak about grammar and spelling when reading a story; and nothing could annoy me more about a story than stupid mistakes. Your story though, is definitely worth taking the time to read. The plot is worthy, characters major and minor are developed well considering this is the first chapter; the descriptions are, well, descriptive. Keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a very cool piece! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Skye is too non-chalant about this situation . I would have went off if that pervert had the nerve to try to butt rape me in the showers . But this is Skye so of course he's chill about it. aleast he didn't rape him .i think our little Jordan would have went to work on coach reston . I see their relationship is getting somewhere, well maybe somewhere sexual but it's still somewhere aleast . i knew skye was a horny but jordan going into the pants in a parking lot . i wonder how jordon's mother is going to react when she finds out of their relationship . good chapter . keep the story coming . i becoming addicted to skye and jordon . |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() To be honest I'm a silent reader most of the time . If I just simply like a story then I truly sometimes don't feel the need to review which is wrong . When I'd read the summary I thought I knew what was going to happen but you took me by a big shock . I'm suprised with the little reviews you have because this story is brillant . Your characters are perfect . I feel like I've known Skye and Jordon my whole life . I fell in love with Skye from the very beginning . For once in a slash fiction we get it from the point of view of a strong character who isn't whiny or acting all weirded out by his sexual orientation and isn't so girly . I love Jordon too . The things he does amuses me alot . From now on I know i'll be a faithful reviewer and reader to your story . |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, three chapters all at once? damn, I'm happy! XD I gotta say I'm happy jordon actually went with it and bit skye, showing his attraction for him, even though he was drunk and can only remember peices... maybe... but I'm so freaking happy they finaly took the first step! I was also quite happy that the pedophile coach was caught on time, even if it took one terrifying experience for skye, him running away and fighting the bastard with only a towel protecting his bits... I hope the director does the right thing and I also hope she starts seeing skye with different eyes, not always thinking he's tainting his son... I'm not saying she should accept him immediately, that wouldn't seem good and it would be freaky how her personality could change but I'm saying I hope she understands a bit the trials he had to went through... I wuv you so god damn much for updating three chapters! it made my day :) I'm looking forward to the next chapter! |