Reviews for Masque Voiler
Lady of Crimson chapter 30 . 3/29/2012
So, I know it's been a few monthes since you updated and I forget if I reveiwed anything so...

I remember reading this once but not anymore so I read it again! I love this SO MUCH. The plot is so realistic on things and Skye's so funny.

If you Still have writers block, an author at a reading said to just write about anything in particular. Just whatever until you think of the right words and stuff. I hope that helps and if your life is hectic and bad I hope it gets better.
stalker chapter 30 . 3/21/2012
guess what? im obsessed with your story. cant log in, in the school computer lab :))
Blublublub chapter 30 . 2/22/2012
Best. Couple. EVER.

I love Skye. Actually I think I love him too much. It may just be a tad bit unhealthy. Assholes are always so hawt. But yeah, him and Jordan are PERFECT. I reallyreallyreally wanna see Jordan meet the guys from California. NYARGH please update soon!
Oshini chapter 30 . 1/1/2012
Woot! I love this story! It's Landon, right, standing outside the shop? I can't wait to meet Jack and Danny, too! I'm really looking forward to reading about their meeting with Jordon. Hope you update soon, as the wait is killing me! ;D
lunasea chapter 30 . 10/28/2011
LOVE IT. I would appreciate some updates please!
my infectious smile chapter 30 . 10/2/2011
This is a wonderful story and I'm looking forward to reading more! Their first time (their attempt at least) will never be forgotten :)
ikfly19 chapter 30 . 9/19/2011
You cannot end it like that. :[

I hope you come back and finish this.
Fumiki chapter 30 . 8/31/2011
Hot make out session in the car... Love those 33 Oh how I wish I was the one who's watching them near the door...

I hate Jordon's mom.

So... Update, pleaseeee?
Birdhouse in Your Soul chapter 1 . 8/28/2011
Not going to lie - You almost lost me at your A/N. Please, use spellcheck. I understand we can't all be brilliant spellers, that's what spellcheck was invented for. And it's worse because the mispellings are minor, but consistent. Please fix them.

Your main character also seems to be bordering on Gary-Stu. He whines through your first four paragraphs. Whiny characters annoy readers. Gratuitous cursing drives certain readers away as well. (I adore the use of the F-bomb in my own writing, but there is a time and a place for it... And typically, it isn't in your first chapter, three times in a paragraph.)

Also, the idea that a "new kid" will be immediately outcast and picked on by "the jocks" is absurd. Most high schoolers are fairly reasonable and will more often ignore a new kid than blatantly shun them. Most will be nice, even, if only briefly.

On into your second chapter, your main character continues to whine and complain and treat the other characters badly, while expecting everyone to be absolutely in love with him. This is incredibly annoying and has made it difficult for me to continue reading this story.

Please do not consider this a flame. I am pointing out areas you could work on to make your story better, not putting it down or insulting it. I understand the difficulties of characterization and story. I have had (and still have, often times) difficulty with those very things.
Darkvoid454 chapter 30 . 8/24/2011
All I have to say is WOW!

Your have not only brought your characters to life but you have made a trueful yet action packed story. I love this story, it is one of the BEST I have read so far.


-sorry for the late review after I read the first chapter and I COULDN'T STOP till I got to the last one.

I also love your A/N they make you more present to the reader which I think is AWESOME! So don't stop!
Regal Coat Woman's Daughter chapter 30 . 8/24/2011
I love this story XD It's funny but serious at the same time.

Anywho, that's a mean way to end a chapter. Very mean. XP I hope you update soon. XDDD
A-Crimson-Memory chapter 27 . 8/12/2011
Awee I'm so happy that they got to finish what they started! Now it's official! They're dating and made love! Now the next step is telling one another they love each other! :)
A-Crimson-Memory chapter 27 . 8/12/2011
Awee I'm so happy that they got to finish what they started! Now it's official! They're dating and made love! Now the next step is telling one another they love each other! :)
A-Crimson-Memory chapter 26 . 8/12/2011
Awee! :) cute chapter! You could definitely see how happy Sky makes Jordon! :)
A-Crimson-Memory chapter 24 . 8/12/2011
Haha oh geez Landon! Well I'm glad sky said he was taken! I know he misses jordon! And as for Sky's mom she's highly dramatic! -.- and jordon's is a total bitch!
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