Reviews for Water Falls
HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
That was actually quite terrifying, which wasn't what I was expecting. The ending was excellent, really powerful, and put across the emotions so well.

I also liked how you played with the ages of the people in the scene. It creates a very 'circle feel' around them, as if you're telling the reader this situation will always repeat itself in some way.

I'm not sure about the shortness of the lines. While they build tension brilliantly in some places, they stop it in others. Some balance is needed. :)
Narq chapter 1 . 4/2/2010
Oh wow. I really liked the way you played around with the reader's attention. It went on from one person to another, to another and then another.

The last line was a bit jarring though.

I saw your profile and i disagree, not a sad attempt at all. :)

Narq.
Corrupted Lungs chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
Whoa! That was really good!