Reviews for Bloody Mary
peachesandcream15 chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
Love the idea, and the way the language flows. Nicely done :)
Isca chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
I liked the subtle rhyming between 'insane' and 'again.' That part of the first stanza flowed really well.

"'Low the dirt." Nice. :)

"You tried to ring the graveyard bell, but from its rusty perch it fell." Honestly, poor Mary, that girl had the worst sort of luck.

"With open eyes and sallow skin and simple emptiness within." This is my favourite line from the poem - it's wonderfully striking.

The poem itself flowed and rhymed quite well. I like your interpretation of the 'Bloody Mary' legend. Keep up the great work. :)