Reviews for Vice
Fierce.Imagination chapter 1 . 6/22/2011
This is a very good, interesting introduction. I'm definitely curious to know more and I wonder what it's all about. So far, your writing skills are well shown and the detailing amount is just right. I would be careful with that, though, as it can easily become too detailed and as a result slow paced.

The situation described in this chapter is a very familiar, yet obviously an uncomfortable background for the story. I can feel the awkwardness throughout this experience and I like that the kids feel much less comfortable than the parents, because the adults obviously know each other much better. Also, Sadie feels even more awkwardness than Eric, because she's in an unfamiliar environment.

Great job!
yuffieyuhffy chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
The summary attracted me to this story. I'm excited to see where it goes. I'm waiting for something to happen, and when something does, I know it will be good!

There were no mistakes or any weird sounding sentences. Everything flowed very nicely. The conversation was good, and it was good that you described what she was doing when she was talking to Eric, Peter, etc. I don't have much to say about the plot, this is only the first chapter after all. Sadie is transitioning like any normal teen would, it's believable.

I like it! I will be reading more.
Blue Ravenn chapter 2 . 6/20/2011
I like the one-on-one action in this and the promise of a rematch. Looking forward to a new chapter 3 soon, hint-hint.
Chancel chapter 2 . 6/20/2011
Hey, I new chapter 2? I like it. I like the way this is pacing out. Can't wait for more!
We Used To Wait chapter 2 . 11/23/2010
Poor girl. I wanted her to make acquaintances this chapter. And she seems a lot different from your other MCs. Really looking forward to the next chapter.

Ta ta.

Blue Ravenn chapter 2 . 11/23/2010
So glad you updated! She might be glad to have a younger brother type who disappears instead of tagging along. But I wonder about Eric. Where does he go?

Is Sadie afraid of the water? She didn't go in, but she did go to the beach. Hmm. And who's the guy at the end? He turned down her game for one-on-one?

Update soon! It's getting difficult to find good stories, and I need this one!
S. M. Saves chapter 1 . 1/13/2010
I read this story yesterday but then my internet died so I wasn't able to leave a review. Darn internet connection!

Anyway, the characters are very three-dimensional. Each one has a personality of his/her own, all are very natural. I kept focusing on Eric expecting him to do something. I just have this feeling that he's going to be a key player in how this story plays out. I have no clue why and maybe I'm totally wrong.

There were a few "false alarms" in this story which gave it a really neat feeling. For example, when Sadie went to join the rest for dinner but couldn't find them at first. I felt a sense of urgency when she was trying to find them but found the dining room and kitchen to be empty. That and the ending were so chilling.

I hope you intend on adding another installment to this story. :)
sw13 chapter 1 . 1/11/2010
Gah! Cliff hanger! Good story, i liked it. Can't wait for more, i'm sure it will only add to the story. Nice one
authorLH chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
Awesome story, update soon please!

-Lain :]
jkanex9 chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
i like this story so far. its a good start. i got a good picture of everything you put :). good job keep writing.

shakey chapter 1 . 9/1/2009
Good story, I really like your style of writing!
Safa Khan chapter 1 . 8/29/2009
Is Sadie like hydrophobic and there's like a lake behind their house?

I really like your writing style! And the part about the blinds and the curtains was familiarly comforting )

I hope you continue this! It's a great first chapter!
dropping dew chapter 1 . 8/21/2009
I'm enjoying this story so far. It's very well written and I hope you continue with it. You did a great job building your characters- I feel like I know Sadie already!
Alice Cullen629 chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
Really good start!

It's very interesting!

Very well written!

Can't wait to read more or your work!
into the black chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
I'm interested to see what direction this story will be going. Hopefully an update is in order?
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