ohh shhhhhht i'm not sure if willow will like that talk... she did violate his privacy but at the same time the guy is so friggin closed to himself that it's hard to know what he feels. again he never speaks... but he loves her ohh i knew it!

why don't she just go and kiss him as she wanted to do before? oh right... common sense... :P

i wonder how this will end up?

i'm looking forward next chapter :P

-M

Great chapter! I'll be waiting for the next! (:

Love this story. Willow and Jazz's closeness is extremely cute and I love her feelings directed toward him. Please update soon!

I loved this chapter. It is definetly the best story I'm reading right now. It sounds a lot like something that happened to my friend, anyway, it's really good! Can't wait for the next chapter, please post it soon! -Anna :)

This chapter seemed a little slow, bogged down by background information. But it's okay, because the information is necessary to understand what's going on.

In the second paragraph, you use a certain word-"mucus-y." I understand what you're trying to convey, but there are better words, preferably real, tried and true adjectives. However, this could be just me, because that's one of my pet peeves. I really don't like that nowadays people can just attach a hyphen and a y to the end of a word and it is suddenly an adjective. Course, it's necessary at times, but this time is not one of them.

Toyotas are great cars! I have one. It's a Camry though. I named him Kapuki. He's my baby. XD

In paragraph ten, you use the phrase "something equally terrible." Can I just thank you for using this instead of saying "something equally as terrible"? It's incredible how many times I see this! It makes me want to throttle the writer! Thank you for using the English language correctly!

In the third to last paragraph, you say "I shake my head, putting it out of my head for the time being." I would suggest using "mind" instead of "head" the second time to reduce repetition.

In the second to last paragraph, you say "And I am absolutely, one-hundred-percent, furious." Do not hyphenate "one hundred percent."

In the last paragraph, I would suggest using a word other than "watery" to describe "smile." It makes him sound like he's drooling rather than crying. Haha. :D

I feel like I was too picky in my review of this chapter. I am looking at it as if I were beta-ing it. These would be my comments if I were your beta. :) Off to the third chapter!

Okay I gotta hurry with this review because I need to get ready for work. :D

During the argument between Lucas and Willow, you italicize too much. I get that you're emphasizing certain words, but the reader has probably got the argument in his head. So he is emphasizing the right words for you. I'm not saying cut all the italics out; I'm saying tone them down. Also, caps lock is NEVER your friend (I don't have italics here. I know you were thinking that I just caps locked you. :D). Seriously. In fiction, caps lock should almost never be used unless you are describing the words on a sign and they are all capitalized or something to that effect.

When you put in ellipses (...) for some reason FP adds a period to the end. That almost killed me every time I saw those. When you have an ellipse, periods are not needed.

Other than these errors, I liked the chapter overall. You jumped right into the action without putting in unnecessary descriptions. Also, I love weeping willows. :) Nice work. I'll read the rest later.

I LOVE YOUR STORY! It's really awesome so far! I can't wait for the next chapter! Please, please, please update soon...

I like Willow, but until now the only emotion I got from him was sadness. I wish there were some fun interaction.. Anyway, I like this story. 3

Much love for the first chapter; Jazz is such a sassy narrator. Looking forward to betaing the rest of this story.