|Reviews for Undertow|
| SuzyJane chapter 10 . 2/24/2010
they're simply wonderful... :)
| SaphireTsukikage chapter 10 . 8/19/2009
i usually don't like haikus but yours are really good.
| Louis Denair chapter 10 . 8/17/2009
I like the contradiction between poised, aristocratic and the screaming along. It shows that even the most restrained, intelligent and diligent beings are susceptible to the passions of life and/or, ultimately, death. I enjoyed this collection of haikus very much. Haikus are elegant and help you to develop a concise and focused style. Funny that whenever I see a collection, it's usually ten pieces. Perhaps it's the old humane symmetric drive revealing itself.
| Louis Denair chapter 9 . 8/17/2009
Fly into my chest- what a wondrously erotic and romantic expression!
| Louis Denair chapter 7 . 8/17/2009
Ah, that is quite the classical haiku. Human being lost in the grand and infinite or near-infinite expanse of existence. Operose, diligent, toiling to make a change, to disrupt the darkness that surrounds him- but too often he or she remains just that, a leaf. Inspiring.
| Louis Denair chapter 6 . 8/17/2009
Sempiternally is a pretty good word to use, something to make you wonder. Lots of interesting vocabulary in this collection. I like the notion here- an individual has the power to mark the world it treads forever, to influence the environment, to eternize his existence through that golden footstep on the sandy expanse of life.
| Louis Denair chapter 4 . 8/17/2009
That's interesting. Heartlessness leaves you barren, empty, something missing from the whole- the whole machinery collapses. The metaphorical implications of these are pretty deep. Eviscerated is a power word if I've ever seen one.
| Louis Denair chapter 2 . 8/17/2009
The bubble bath metaphor was pretty amusing and light-hearted. Put a smile on my face.
| StarlightWish17 chapter 10 . 8/16/2009
I love it. All of it! I wanna read it all over again! Your so talented! :D
| StarlightWish17 chapter 9 . 8/16/2009
This one makes me smile. Not in like a 'hah hah' funny kind of way but like a... I dunno... happy/calm way? If that makes sense. I dunno. But it made me feel all warm inside. :D Sorry if that's not what you intended. O_o But I just think that it was a very pretty piece.
Like the rest!
| StarlightWish17 chapter 8 . 8/16/2009
Aw. Come back bud! D:
Lol sorry. ;
I thought that this was really pretty too though. Gah. The whole thing is! Your such an awesome writer.
| StarlightWish17 chapter 6 . 8/16/2009
Wow. That's so pretty. I keep reading it over and over again, lol.
| StarlightWish17 chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
I had to look up the word frigorific. Haha. I feel lame. xD
But now that I know what it means, I find that I really like that word.
| Isca chapter 10 . 8/16/2009
You had me at "aristocratic." I love that word. I love that you used that word in this haiku. I love that such a strong sense of regality was placed alongside 'monstrous' imagery. This was a great way to end the collection. I daresay that this is one of the best haiku collections I've ever read on FP. If I haven't mentioned it already, your diction level is downright exceptional. What else can I say? Keep up the wonderful work, Amaury. You should definitely write another haiku collection soon. :)
| Isca chapter 9 . 8/16/2009
"She will fly into my chest." I love this line. I couldn't help but think that the speaker believes that after his 'waiting period' is over, he will finally 'fall in love' with the right woman.