Reviews for first day of forever
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 1/30/2012
Beautiful poem, drew me in and didn't let go. The idea of "first day of forever" is just… amazing.

"But in between… you can no longer find your reflection." Whoa. Love this for some reason. Such a beautiful work _
cab fed hig chapter 1 . 1/17/2011
your expressions are beautiful. i love the words you've wielded to apprehend a certain exaggeration about your subject. even the subtle alliteration and congruent structures are perfect.

"and the tears you cry are stars",

"a kaleidoscope of doubts"
Whaaoouusses chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
I really really like this, especially the contrast between the red flowers and the blue eyes with the lack of reflection in between :)
for shame chapter 1 . 11/14/2009
i like this poem.

i'm determined to read all of your pieces by the end of tonight.


"but in between, you can no longer find your reflection."

another favorite line of mine.

you have fantastic imagery.
tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
this is beautifully written! the idea of the "first day of forever" is amazing and you've crafted it well.

the only suggestion i would have is to remove the "!" in the first line. exclamation points in poetry are used to express powerful, loud lines and for this kind of piece, i would say that it would be better without one.

great job, i'm looking forward to reading more of your work!
xxmorethanthisxx chapter 1 . 8/22/2009
2 word: awesomely amazing
KatyCullen09 chapter 1 . 8/18/2009
This is so good
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
about growing up?

that's what it sounds like to me. many nice lines in this, like "the tears you cry are stars" and the last three lines of the poem especially. the final stanza in particular hit home. nice work.

the only thing i would suggest changing is that the period at the end of "you can no longer find your reflection." might make the stanza flow better if it were a comma instead.
room with a view chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
Woderful :)