|Reviews for Perfect Ending|
| Vivianilous chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
i really like this story ]
to be honest it was very intresting
good job ;)
| HeyyyitsPickle chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
aw. that was sweet :)
| Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
I have to admit, this came off as a little unrealistic. I mean, she was saying how she hated the guy, and then they're stuck in the elevator for a few minutes and it feels as if they both changed personalities completely. I understand that he's had feelings for her for a while now, but pretty much everything that happened in the second scene felt a bit out of character. Granted, we didn't get a good look at Jason and the MC beforehand. Maybe that's the problem. Maybe a little more fleshing-out in the first scene would make the rest seem more believable?
Okay, I'm rambling now. Sorry about that. Don't take any of this personally or anything. This isn't a flame, you know. I'm just sharing my genuine thoughts on it. Though I doubt you'd care because your profile says that you won't be insulted. lol
Anyway, you're actually an excellent writer. I can definitely see some potential here and I'm actually looking forward to seeing perhaps a longer story from you in the future.
Good luck! :)