The beginning and end of this piece really make it something. The thunderstorm warning bit really turns the piece into something extraordinary.

The downfall? The middle part just uses such mundane language. If you could maybe just spice it up a bit... this would be perfect.

Overall, awesome job!

i really liked this poem! its really good, very well written!

I love this piece, I just love the symbolism of the words and what they really mean. It was so short, yet so powerful. Astounding!