Well, finally, I've had time to finish this story. The ending wasn't unsatisfactory, I thought anything more would have been, as you said, not really believable.

I very much enjoyed your story and I think I'll look into your newest one, especially since nightmares interest me so (as evident by my own story). -yeah, okay. shameless plug.

ANYWAY. Some quick and hopefully constructive criticism. You are a talented writer and you have a fine story here, and I'm but an amateur myself, so don't take anything too seriously.

*It did, after awhile, get annoying to have Christina's actions so similar the whole story. Michael grew and changed as a character, whereas I could barely tell her reactions apart from the first to the last chapter.

*Many scenes were repetitive, not in literal context, but sometimes it was like, 'haven't they had this fight already?'

*Also the constant use of 'fuck' was grating, but that's no reflection on your writing skill, just my personal preference and I realize it suits Michael's character.

*Your "ending" doesn't feel like an ending at all, just as if the story keeps going. A nice climax, especially in such an action-tensed plot might have helped

That is all- well done again. (:

This story is amazing. I stayed up until 2:45 AM last night reading it because I just couldn't stop. You're an amazing writer. I really love everything about it - the plot, the dialogue, the sexual tension between Michael and Christina... everything. There were no boring parts to skim over, and I thought the "M" parts were very tastefully done.

I must admit that I love happy endings, but I was satisfied with the way you finished this. It was bittersweet, but those of us who've read the whole story and come to love these characters know that it's definitely not the last they'll ever see of each other... especially given that there's a sequel. When I found that out, it totally made my day. :D

I read a lot of stories on this site, but I'm rather choosy about what I put on my favorites list. I had 10 stories there before, and yours is now the 11th. Wonderful work. :)

OMG I loved reading this!

I can't thank you enough for making Christina hate Michael until the end (or up until chapter 28 or 29), because otherwise it wouldn't have been that believable, really cliché, and the hostage thing would have been a really crappy excuse for a relationship between both characters, instead of a real hostage story, with all the horrible stuff that comes with it.

I read the first two chapters of the sequel, and I hope to find it on Authonomy. I have an account there to read, didn't know you, but I'll go check it out!

Really really really nice story of yours!

I presumed that she was pregnant and lost her baby, because

the bleeding and her sickness.. it's such a tragedy!

It was Michael's and her child..hm...really sad!

But at the beginning, I thought that they will NEVER

get along with eachother, nice job done!

Best part: “You think you fucking know me? I'm an

assassin. I kill people for a living. And that girl

you just fucking sold out is the only thing in

this world that makes me remotely human.”

I hope, you will write an sequel about them, it will

be interesting, what will she study, something about

criminology or psychology? And how she lives after this all..

and what he does and perhaps they can never forget eachother..;-)

Really interesting plot and of course a good one to continue in the future!

DA-chen

i think ur wrong, chapter 29 was depressing but not all that depressing as a miscarriage was. You wounded me with a knife on that chapter...i loved the story on a whole tho and i cannot wait to read the sequel

*trips* Uh-oh...

Reading the part where Michael was getting pissed off at the guards for drugging the water, my thoughts traveled along the lines of "Hypocrite" and "Turnabout is fair play, asshole". A wonderful chapter, as always :D

What the efiin HELL? It's over? Just like that? BULL! NO! You can't do that. It's against the mother effin law to end a story with loose ends like that.

ending. Good story, but VER ending.

Oh MY god. She was pregnant and she miscarrying, right?

Wow. He left. I'm not gonna cry. Really, I'm not.

Omg.

Jesus Christ. She faints a whole friggin lot.

Smft? Who the hell's at the frickin door? They totally interrupted a 'bonding' moment.

"Arrogant, cocky littl k."

Love that line.

How could Michael do that to her? How could he?