|Reviews for You'll Never Be Mine|
| Katerzzz chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
This is really really good!
Fantasic lyrics, I am a rubbish poet/songwriter but what the heck? It was brilliant in my opinion
Keep up the talent! It don't come around that often!
(Thanks for reviewing mah story!I really appreciated it)
| RainbowNightmares chapter 1 . 10/11/2009
wow, it's really good...you must be talented or something!
| Patricia Louise chapter 1 . 10/2/2009
Great song! Hehee, I could really hear it to a tune...of course, it's just some random tune in my head so..."you manhore" had to be my favorite part! Just a tiny little grammatical thing, the your in the line "I see a girl your kissing in my face" should be "you're."
Thanks for your review on Arrival in Wartsburg, Germany! I'll read your next chapter of The Nanny Sitters Club soon!
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 8/28/2009
I really liked the youthful exuberance from the first portion of your song. It made me think of high school, and a charming little girl wanting to meet a boy. It was very serene, and hopeful, and I really liked the overall mood of it.
The second half kind of lost me, she goes from wanting to know more about him, to totally bashing him mercilessly. I guess I feel that it would have made more sense if they had had a more serious relationship/connection, and then she sees him kissing the other girl, I think then it would have made sense to call him a man-whore. Maybe if you put in more about a conversation they had, or a connection, it would have made it come off more clearer. Keep up the good work.
| Tangence chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
Did you have a melody in mind when you wrote this?
And I liked the ending, that was a bit of a suprise. :)
It's just that some of your lines are a little long, so it doesn't flow as well as it could...
Well, that's all i have to say.
| lymli chapter 1 . 8/26/2009
it's a cool song! I like the rhyme.
| L.A. Clearwater chapter 1 . 8/25/2009
Hm...have you ever felt this way before?
| Punslinger chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
I like the lyrics. But, of course, we can't be sure it will be a good song until it is set to mucic. I am curious about the line "No you want" did you mean "No you won't"? or "I no want you"?