Reviews for The Breath of Lies |
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kenzieivy6 chapter 1 . 1/15/2014 I really like the story. Daniel is actually one of my favorite characters. I just started reading this fanfiction last weekend, and I am already done. I really want some more chapters I You are not too busy? |
someone random chapter 17 . 12/7/2013 Your last comment in this is very true and what you mentioned about people not knowing immediately is what distinguishes novels from fanfictions and fictionpress story's. This is also one of the reasons novels are always better and why I sometimes want to throw my laptop across the room wail I am reading, make me want to immediately stop reading and vomit ALL THE TIME! This feeling happens because they do not build up suspense and just tell you in the next chapter. The Anita Blake series by Laurell K. Hamilton is a good example, because it hides a lot of things, but it still revels some things. The Hollows series by Kim Harrison is also a good example, because it does not revel anything. Both of these series are supernatural series. I very much like the way that you have written this story and I think that with a few tweaks it could be novel material. So try your best and keep writing. I want to read more. |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/20/2013 Dude do you have any idea who anne rice is? |
Guest chapter 40 . 6/28/2013 Are you gonna write more? |
SundayMorning73 chapter 40 . 6/13/2013 Ah! As I started reading I figured 40 was the transition to the sequel and didn't even think to look if there was a sequel yet and dammit it all now im stuck in suspense! I've been reading this non stop and just dammit! |
SundayMorning73 chapter 18 . 6/10/2013 One thing I really feel the need to express is how well the beginning played into the story. The opening where you don't quite know what's going on but soon catch on and with the fact that (and thank you for this) their fake love wasn't part of the story adds something to the dynamic. She isn't going on and on about het love of him either but her mentioning it, like in this chapter, makes you stop and reflect on it. Not sure if that makes sense but I tried to explain my 'wow' moment to you. |
SundayMorning73 chapter 1 . 6/10/2013 That was awesome detail. Not too much but not too little. Realistic. I'm excited for the rest. |
iojf244 chapter 40 . 2/8/2013 Please Update! |
Jessy-8739 chapter 40 . 1/19/2013 I love it, it's one of the best stories I've ever read on fiction press and fan fiction. Oh, and...would Mira's finger...possibly, eh...grow back? It must felt horrible having only four fingers on one hand. *sigh* |
MusicIsMyPoison chapter 2 . 10/23/2012 Hi, love this story, I have read it so many times it is just amazing :) but one question, Mira keeps referencing her previous love for Isaac, even in this chapter, even though they have only just met. Was there a previous story between them, because she also references it in later chapters. I just wanted to clear that up cuz I was really confused :p |
EireGal chapter 40 . 10/4/2012 You know ive been thinking its about time i got an update, been with you for a long time but only recently got an account, ive always been guest!. So as the crack addict to the dealer...can i have a fix soon please... Oh obviously love the story, I can not understand how this story has so few followers and reviews, it blows most of the crap on fp out of the water. Please please please u are appreciated and Isaac swoon please say no more he is the man or should that be the vamp, love it sooooo UPDATE. |
Guest chapter 40 . 9/13/2012 Go on...Its been a month, why not up-date. Love your beautiful twisted mind, I want to dive into your world again soon. This last chapter, as always, did not dissapoint. So go on...Update |
Folklore zombie chapter 40 . 8/28/2012 I have greatly enjoyed reading this story so far. I salute you for coming up with Daniel. A character so despicable, that i can't even imagine a fitting punishment for him. Hell would have to open a new circle just for him. |
Dark Hime chapter 40 . 8/13/2012 A chapter late, but i live Daniel. And i think he's hella sexy simply because he gives no fucks. He does whatever he wants whenever he wants, he's domineering and has a reason behind everything he does. Even if it is sick and twisted. And idk what that makes me but i love his character and the fact that he seems so in control even in his fury. I love him more than Isaac and Cern and that's saying something cause i like Cern a lot. I'll be very sad if Daniel dies and i don't get to read about him having hot sex with someone in full detail. Hell I'll be said if he dies period. Lol |
isfjio245 chapter 39 . 6/7/2012 Please update |