Reviews for Everyone's on my Back
sunscraped chapter 1 . 8/27/2009
I think rather than using untrusting, you should try distrustful. Otherwise, your poem is fine.
G.Elyse chapter 1 . 8/27/2009
contrairy to the previous review, i really like the format of this poem. it feels rushed and almost desperate, which i really liked. good job!
SacrificialLamb chapter 1 . 8/27/2009
It’s very short; I think you should lengthen it. That said I did enjoy it, but it needs work, I don’t like the way you spaced it either it’s too choppy this way