|Reviews for Control|
| Guest chapter 6 . 2/20
hey,give the next chapter
| Sui Lestrange chapter 6 . 12/31/2010
Oh you have to update this i can't wait to see how it's going next.
| queenjade chapter 6 . 12/21/2010
Nice to have you back, i was wondering what happened to Shelly and Brandon! In fact im THRILLED to read this, it's one of the best stories ive read on fictionpress (and you can check my favourites list..ive read lots!)
Ive had a seriously crappy week and this has single handedly been the only thing thats cheered me up, so thank you for that :)
still great chemsitry between Shelley and Brandon and this chapter was brilliant.. i cant wait for the next( which btw sounds hilarious)
Hope you update soon!
The more i read about Brandon the more i love him..id be happy if i got him for christmas lol :D
I cant believe this story doesnt have more reviews..it deserves them!
Merry Christmas and Happy new year :)
| the.sky.angel chapter 6 . 12/15/2010
Hope u keep writin! XD
| CaBlasch87 chapter 6 . 12/14/2010
addictive, very good
| sarcasm is my middle name chapter 6 . 12/14/2010
Cuute story/cliche, love the plot :D
| Beartrap chapter 6 . 12/14/2010
You're alive! So glad for an update. Love the story. Can't wait for more. Especially more Branden Shelly interaction!
| anita darling chapter 5 . 10/30/2010
I am enjoying this so much, you know. But you haven't updated since like July :(. Which makes me worry a little bit. When will you update next? I can't wait either way!
I loved their banter.
I hope that you find the time to be able to update soon.
| anita darling chapter 2 . 10/30/2010
Since you used so many pleases, I decided to review :). You do know that this is so totally adorable, yes? I look forward to reading the next chapter!
Maisy :) x
| cosmopolitan chapter 1 . 10/19/2010
haha, so cute
i miss this story
| Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 5 . 7/5/2010
Can't wait for more!
Hope you update soon!
Have a great week!
| queenjade chapter 5 . 7/5/2010
ohh what a BRILLIANT chapter :) lots of funny Shelly-Brandon banter :D
Im so glad you decided to update, i was wondering what happened to this story so i was so excited you posted a new chapter! seriously, i was chuffed!
I LOVE BRANDON :D omg i just LOVE him!
As for the next few chapters..im glad shes not going to be able to escape him :)
seriously, cant wait for the next update :)pleasee be soon!
Keep up the amazing work!
| darkgurl92 chapter 5 . 7/4/2010
is she doing that to riley
she should let him go if she doesn't like him anymore..
but can't wait for the four months on tour..
| cheap imitation chapter 4 . 6/16/2010
T.T *CRYING* it's the last chapter already ... and man was it a good one.
Ok so aside from the HOT and seriously INTENSE makeout session (seriously these two can't keep their hands off of one another can they? :p haha) I'm loving this one line - when Brandon said he expected her to walk around him given how she's been acting the past 10 days. I said before that I love how you leave subtle hints here and there that are left for reader interpretation and this is a fine example. For me, it felt like Brandon was definitely bitter over how their relationship and dynamic has changed.
Also, since you mentioned Riley - I'm curious to see how he reacts to the touring news but I think it's a blessing for Rochelle because at least now she can hold off on the whole moving in thing for another 4 months haha. As I said earlier, I would like to see more development on Riley only because I do genuinely think he can provide more tension and add another element to this complex relationship rather just being a simple obstacle to these two getting together. For some strange reason, I'm intrigued by Riley's character - perhaps it's the fact that he's the clingy and openly affectionate and emotionally invested of the two haha.
My heart was breaking by the last few lines - they were both so .. confused and overwhelmed and shocked by what happened so naturally and the repetition of "you dropped this" made me feel helpless .. strangely. Like it was strange that after such an intense sexually charged moment - they numbly go back to "normalcy" just like that. I applaud your writing prowess to evoke such emotions out of me as a reader.
Seriously - even if I've been singing you praises since my first review, I really do think you're an excellent and talented writer who has set up a brilliant story with equally as engaging characters that feel rounded and real and hardly cardboard. I'm looking forward to where you plan on taking this story and I hope you'll have time and inspiration to continue updating frequently - even if it means I have to leave many reviews P
| cheap imitation chapter 3 . 6/16/2010
DUNDUNDUN. *GASPGASPGASP* just when I thought this couldn't get any better - you, dear author are FREAKING BRILLIANT.
Firstly, I adore the "Control Your..." chapter titles ) Definitely fitting and it's so simple I can't help loving it.
OK. Since I just read through this chapter a second or third time I'm going to comment very randomly and I doubt you'll be able to sift through exactly what I'm raving on about but .. just know that I loved this third chapter from start to end .. and it seriously left my heart beating far too crazy and fast. If my heart palpitations result in a sudden fainting spell, don't worry I won't hold you accountable P
The last section of this chapter - the big confrontation and where Brandon reveals a serious and angry side of him. WOAHWOAHWOWZERS. I think I just fell in love with a fictional character - the first time in a few years I'll admit. I love how SPOT ON and confronting he was and WOW it just opened up a can of worms because now Rochelle seriously has to accept reality and what she ultimately knows is true (no matter how much she wants to deny it).
And poor Rochelle :( poor thing is frazzled and seriously up in arms trying to grab at anything resembling normalcy. I felt her desperation in coming to terms with everything, especially when Brandon confronted her. I also felt for her when she had to lie to Riley. Her guilt was heartbreaking :( But it's interesting to note that while she does feel guilty and remorseful towards Riley, she doesn't regret what happened ;) hahaha how can she? Brandon is too hot to resist :p
OH OH! Back to the start, I just have to add that Brandon's teasing manner at the start .. THUMP. /is dead. I applaud Rochelle for keeping it barely together at that moment.
AND I have to mention how Brandon lied about his father. I LOVE that you're sneaking in these little tell tale signs that Brandon is genuinely interested in her.
All in all - you were on point with this chapter in terms of emotionally fleshing out the two characters. Not only did you show us the obvious emotional struggles but you hinted at the smaller signs like Brandon being almost offended at the idea that he'd take advantage of Rochelle or how she was guilty but not regretful of her night with Brandon.
Amazing work so far - this chapter is a definite highlight and I'm so sad that there's only one left ... please please update soon! I'm far too obsessed now :p hahaha