|Reviews for Metamorphosis|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
"poof! said the girl as she disappeared"... "Poof!" said the girl
"fell into the water Her lungs deflated"... water. Her
"sank and wept Her salty tears"... wept. Her
I thought the idea was interesting. I also think your descriptions were pretty good and I loved that last line. The only thing is I don't get if this happened on purpose or what. It was a tad confusing.
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