Reviews for Personal Universe Poems
simpleplan13 chapter 5 . 9/6/2009
Again I like how you used words from other pieces. It really does tie the collection together. I also liked the word mine in the last line. It kinda made me wonder if different people would have different ones. Again, great word choices!

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simpleplan13 chapter 4 . 9/6/2009
I liked how this piece took the word tarnished from the other piece and the idea of tears as raindrops. That really brought it together as a collection, though I'm slightly confused why they all had a wolf except the one tiger...

I like this as a take on the boy crying wold. It's really different. Again, your word choices and descriptions are great as well.
simpleplan13 chapter 3 . 9/6/2009
I love that first line. Enmity is such a unique word choice. I also like the au naturel part. That was cute and a bit humorous. The title is great too. Interesting that the wolf is back instead of the tiger... I wonder if the next will have an animal.
simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 9/6/2009
I liked the last line. That was a really interesting concept. I also liked the word tarnished. It was a nice choice.

I have to say, the piece kind of confused me though. Most likely it's me being stu0p0id, but I didn't get the harness was.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
I really loved the last stanza. How you used all the other stanzas. However, the whole wolf thing seemed kinda random. I don't get why you capitalized wolf in the third stanza and it just didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the words.

I did like the piece though. Your descriptions and word choice are really powerful and beautiful. Great job.

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