|Reviews for Lighthouse|
| Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
I love this whole extended metaphor of a lighthouse and being lost at sea. Wonderfully written :)
| rolliepollie44 chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
I love all the questions posed, a very depressing peice, you really brought out the pain of losing somebody, very neat idea with the light, lovely job. :)
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
"No glimpse of land"... You need a period at the end or a semi-colon.
"You shone so bright."... that sounded awkward. Is shone the correct tense? It may be, but it still sounds off.
"In a place so dark."... that's not a sentence
"My guide to safety./Was nothing more/Than a bulb."... that's all one sentence
I liked the idea of a lighthouse and I think you did a good job with it in the beginning, but then it seemed more like you switched to just a light in general. The water aspect or the you being a ship aspect kinda disappeared. Still, nicely done.
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| He Smelled Of Rain chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Great work! Very creative.
| GirlWithTheBrokenSmile chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Beautifully done:) You don't really see a lot of male poets on here and when you do, they usually aren't, um, very good. You're an exception, though, and I really enjoyed it:) Keep it up!