|Reviews for Shady thoughts|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
I love how you switch from the whole earth to just that person. It's a great contrast and shows how important that person is. I do like the piece in general. I think your descriptions are great. I also like your line breaks. Like ending with stop and having "you and me" on its own line. My only thought is maybe the "I want to dance to your tune" should be a new stanza? Just a though. Anyway it's a great piece!
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| lymli chapter 1 . 9/3/2009
it's wonderful and cute, the imagery is beautiful, I like the thing about calling home the dark.
| SomeoneToLove chapter 1 . 9/3/2009
I really like this, especially the last line; for some reason it appeals to e. I think it's a really well written poem, and I found it very interesting... :)