I see loads of potential

and I can relate to this poem completely

Keep the work!

/ PunkFunk

"You my princess,"... You, my princess

"I cannot bare to see you hurt,"...bear

"Not even a rustle in your skirt,"... I liked that line. The word rustle was an interesting choice.

I think the rhyming was a bit odd. It rhymed it certain places but not others. Still, the piece was really bittersweet. Well done.

PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile).

hahaha i like this one too! hahahahah what now? hahhahha there is still one more that i need to read! hahhahahaha im hungry! hhahahahhahahahahh i say hahahahhahahhahah alot dont i hahahahhahahahhahahahh so should i start with a mhaw instead? idont no lets try it i dont no i think i like yeh i deffintly stiking whith hahahahahahahahahahahah