|Reviews for Lilith|
| R.D.Palmgren chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
Hard to read when you put it all in one paragraph.
If u read a book and notice every time someone speaks, its a new paragraph or when u change subjects.
You need to start with one event, talk about it, then move on to the next event.
If u need help in showing u let me know and I will show u what u can do with your story
| john chapter 1 . 9/4/2009
intersting cant wait to read more.