Reviews for The Abyss
thewhimsicalbard chapter 1 . 12/31/2009
OK... My suggestion on this is to export this to document form and rewrite it so that each line is single spaced and each separate piece (COUGHworstbookeverCOUGH) is double spaced, i.e.:

verse

verse

verse

verse

chorus

chorus

verse

verse

verse

etc.

Use shift for single-line breaks. If you split the parts up, and maybe use bold print for the chorus (and correct me if I'm wrong, but this song does have one, right?), I think that would make this lots easier to read.

On a critical note, I'm surprised that this is an "effing rocked out guitar" song, but there was no rhyming at all. To the best of my knowledge - and I do have quite a lot of it - rhyme is the basis of all rock and roll, or anything heavier than that.
IWannaRunaway chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
I really really like this song! You have a talent1 A very good talent!

Peace

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