Reviews for Shades of Grey
Kara Mia chapter 1 . 9/10/2009
I loved the way this flowed. My favorite line was: "...falling,

...falling,

...falling…"

You captured the essence of your subject perfectly. It was really good. :-)

-KM
Isca chapter 1 . 9/10/2009
"Everything is shades of grey." I like this line because I can relate to it.

"I plan to end my pain today." This is a very angsty line. :)

"Now I'm falling." Powerful. Wow.

"Nobody is ever weeping. Except for willows." Lovely. :D
LostInMe chapter 1 . 9/8/2009
Very well done! I really like it! The meter you chose is extremely catchy - even though the poem is angsty, it's still important to be enjoyable to read.

"Life is ending

Death is calling

Now I’m

...falling,

...falling,

...falling…"

Nice effect, and I love the words.

Now, for some constructive criticism:

"I plan to end my pain today" - Drop a syllable here.

"Except for willows" - Same case. Suggestion: EXCEPT can be changed to BUT or SAVE.

"Goodbye…that’s all I have to say." Again, there's an extra syllable.

Apart from those three lines, everything was perfect. Whether you choose to change them or not, I still love the poem.
steffxnie chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
Good flow, the words you used are simple and straight to the point. The 'falling...' bit has a nice effect, and it's nicely done.

'Except for willows

Head on pillows

Now I’m fading into grey'

I like this part!

Sorry, I can't write good reviews. D:

Anyways, great poem. Well done!
SoneAnna chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
I must say I LOVE the rhyme scheme you used in this. It makes it flow in such a lovely manner, despite the theme of the poem itself.

The last couple of stanzas...wow that was sad. But I guess that's the point of depression. I also loved the way you conveyed such a common and over occouring indcident you hear these days in such a meaningful manner.

Kudos.

Sone, from the Review Marathon (link in my profile)