Reviews for Heaven
Quaver Ava chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
(laughs out loud) Oh god that was funny. If hevan is like that, I'd much rather go to hell.
Denizen47 chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
For me, this didn't work. The rhyme scheme was erratic, you seemed to be choosing words and phrases just to fit into your garbled rhyme scheme. It seems forced, and trite. The overall message has some merit but loses all sense of moral high ground with the poor execution and misunderstanding of the Christian depiction of heaven.

Though you may have been told or heard otherwise - the Christian view of life after death is one in which everyone is accepted, regardless of creed, colour, sexuality or even species.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
I like you stance on this subject, and I agree. Faith shouldn’t be so single-minded; the overall underlying theme of Christ was love and acceptance, and most modern religions have become incapable of doing that.

I like how you basically told a story in poetry form. Using dialogue really worked well, and you showed a clear beginning, middle, and end. Nice work here, keep up the good work.

Much love,

Lea Ai chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
I know that you intended this to be humorous and so I am not going to comment too much on the theology in this, but only on your A/N. This poem is not based on the "Christian view of Heaven", but merely on your opinion of the Christian view of Heaven...and unfortunately there are a lot of hypocrites out there. The true Biblical Christian view of Heaven is one where anyone is allowed in regardless of their "religion" or sins here on earth. We are judged not by our merit, but by Christ's merit. There is only one qualification and it is open to anyone...just accept Christ's gift. The Bible makes it clear that there will be people there from all walks of life-people that would surprise us here-because it is an individual choice. You don't have to do "good" things, you don't have to meet certain expectations...and I personally think there will be animals in Heaven-Jesus comes back riding on a white horse. :-D

As far as the poem itself did a wonderful job of making this rhyme. Great word choices.
An-Author-At-Heart chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
OMG this is hilarious! I'm kind of the opposite of religious (won't say the word... it starts with an A though...) and I found this quite amusing. It was really funny! I've joked with a buddy of mine about how we'd have a blast in hell, but this poem also brings up the dark side of religion, in a way, at their almost exclusive version of what is a "good person". Not only that, but the rhymes and the rhythm was good, it flowed well.