I really liked this story, I'm sad to see it end. Just a note though, even though I liked how you simply made the book characters appear in real life, the ending is sort of abrupt and unexplained. Maybe you meant it to be sort of mysterious, but it leaves a lot of questions. Does the book just not matter anymore? Who was the original owner/girl who they were searching the forest for? What exactly is the moral/lesson/point of the story? What about the story in the book? Does it simply stop, or change, because she's gone? Most of the essential parts of it were because of Jennifer. I think maybe I just feel like there ought to be an epilogue to tie up loose ends.

You, however, are the author, and it's totally up to you how you want this to end, and what is really important.

Thank you for writing this lovely tale!

~Lady

aw that was a sweet ending

at first i thought she was gonna be alone :( lol

Honestly, I kinda hated you for a while there...because you made her leave. Then I realized that you brought them back...so yeah. I loved the ending. It was amazing. This does need an epilogue/sequel. I highly doubt it'll happen, but oh well.

THank you for writing an amazing story, looking foward to other things you write.

Ok I understand as to why ppl may think the ending was a bit rushed..

Maybe you can do the following:

because Jen can't read the words within the book, she finds someone who can. When she gies to meet the person, she finds out the persons name is Mary and that she was also sucked into the book before... Mary reads to her that the war ended with rebels beind triumphent. Now Jen will have peace in her heart knowing that the fictional Gray was ok in the book.. Mary then explains that everyone only gets one chance to be within this book, so there is no point in trying to electrocution..

Ye I am trying to spit out ideas... And these are all suggestions which you can turn a cold shoulder to.. After all the author always knows best for her characters and plot..

Have fun writing!

The ending is not bad but I wish it lasted a little longer but it is a good story and thank you for writing it.

I don't like this at all... I wanted her to go back! I wanted her friends to inquire about Mary. The way you ended it was sudden and not very well thought out.

*turns head away*

I do not like the way you have ended this at all. My thoughts are that it was a bad decision... #.# I don't really like what you've done to finish it at all.

. The ending has left the book unfinished... I'll tell you why. The first chapter starts the book off, the first couple of chapters confirm the basic theme and surroundings of a book. By bringing her back to her life beforehand, you have ruined the feel and connection I had with the book beforehand.

Endings are usually happy, miserable, or unresolved... but they have to bring out a strong level of emotion. The emotions all have connections to the book. Anger distances the book and the reader though.

This is a review and what I consider to be critique. Understand that you are not to take it personally... but next time, consider against such endings... as this one has distanced me from your book.

Stay Well...

I'm really confused... was that actually Gray? Did he remember her? Where did he come from? I'm a little bit disappointed in the ending... it was so abrupt. Is there going to be an epilogue to maybe explain a little bit of what just happened?

Apart from that- fantastic story! I enjoyed it the whole way through... although the ending has left me more than a little confused.

Fantastic story, I'm sad it's over ;-; I wish you had given us Gray's name in the real world though, I was curious! Oh well.

~ Caiti

I'm so sad it's over! Great story and I can't wait to read more from you! :)

you should do a sequel.

ok...as predictable as the ending was after i figured out she went home, it still managed to be really cute. though i wish it would go on i think you did a great job at finishing it.

Gah! I'm a sucker for heart-felt endings. The whole story in all had me hooked til the end and I can't wait to see what you cook up next. If you ever had this published, which I honestly suggest that you do, I would certainly want a copy!

No no no! It can't be over :(. I mean I am happy that Jen got her knight in shining armor, bit I have grown so attached to these characters that I just can't let go... Aw very well written!

I hope there is an epilogue; there has to be one...

Write a sequal... Pretty please?

Overall, thanks for the story I really did enjoy it! :)

best as always - Lina xoxoxo

aw! that's sucha ending!

but what happened? :P

hah

thanks so much for this story! :D

and for completeing it! :D :D :D

It's over? Can't be over. You have to at least give us an epilogue before you move onto another story. Pretty please?