Can I tell you how pleased I am to find such a charming (no pun intended) and well-written story on FP? I don't look a lot but sometimes I find complete crap so I was so happy to start reading this and realize it's the opposite! I hate that there are 14 chapters already because I'm very tempted to cheat. :P I will try not to. I like the pacing, it's not too fast - as in you haven't jumped right into the romance or the plot as I'm still confused as to what's going on. Which is a good thing! You don't want to exhaust that stuff too early.

Am I crazy or do I not know this character's first name? Maybe I read it and missed it or maybe you have deliberately not told us? Interesting.

I caught one little thing- toward the bottom you refer to Claire as Mary. Just a little confusing. :)

Good work! - next chapter.

Demetre's mom scares me haha. His dad seems nice enough though. I really really HATE his sister. I can't believe she doesn't get why the "True Love Kiss" thing didn't work. I think she needs to kiss Grey haha. Just a thought ;) Great Job! I LOVE this story! Please post soon with cherries on top!

Interesting family dynamics going on. Cool.

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Porcelain looking should be hyphenated: porcelain-looking. Because if you removed porcelain you would have "looking steps".

"I tried my hardest to be graceful, I knew that eyes were still watching my every move." That's a comma splice. Easy to fix. You could make it two separate sentences by putting a the comma is, or you could just stick an "and" in there. or, if you want to indicate that the two phrases are related to eachother, you could put in a semicolon (;). You have a similar problem in a couple other places too. Just remember to make sure that you don't join two complete sentences with a comma unless you put a coordinating conjunction in there too (,and/but/nor/so/for/or/yet).

I hope that was helpful and not just annoying.

I had a Grammar exam today, so it's fresh in my mind.

hey what happened to grey?

i really want her to end up with gray.

oh man! I can't wait for the next chapter! I want to see the confrontation between her and the king and queen! It's going to be so exciting!

HGS

Will she ever get home? or make this place her new home? So many questions...so you'd better continue...XD...great chap.

Demetrie sounds too good to be true, and Gray is afraid to show his feelings because he's afraid that he would offend the prince.

Interesting plotline/concept for a story u have here! :D

The more I read, the more I like it.

I can't help but wonder if Gray's sister is going to make an appearance at some point. Or if somehow Jen will talk the prince into bringing Gray along. There are countless ways this story could go.

And I love how you portray Jen's concern on falling in love. Since it's true that not all woman jump head first into love the first chance they get. There are those, who are terrified of the pain it could bring them. And don't want to go through emotional nightmare of falling, and hoping it lasts, only have it end without warning.

All and all Bravo,

Now would you please do me the small favor of reading one of my stories. Just a Chapter out of Justice Slayer, since if you read any of the others you might get confused. You don't have to but I would really be thankful.

Hi!

I've just found this story and I really, really enjoy reading it. That said, I can't wait for you to update :D

Anyway, keep up the great work and have lots of inspiration!

~Arvael

hey,

i really love this story, time travel etc etc is sorta my fetish when it comes to books. Jen is an awseome character and you've constructed her really well..

i really hope that she ends up with Gray, becasue i think that the Prince would be to easy, and they have to find his sister. Sorry if these wishes are offending you, i'm just fantasisin, as always.

lol

keep writting okay?

Fact Based Fiction .x.

I really like this story and can't wait to find out what happens!

HGS

Wow, Derek is a jerk!

More good stuff. Awesome. Keep the chapters coming.

Dude. This was awesome! Derek is such a fucking brute man. I would have killed him and Gray... He needs to be with Jen. Gray could also growl at me anytime. lol.

I'm sad this chapter ended! I want more! I want to know how the story unfolds!

HGS