|Reviews for Ode To Suicide|
| iluvshoe chapter 1 . 9/21/2009
i loved it!
(like that's a surprise)
it really shows it for what it is...
and i agree with -anika k.-,
the last line is epic!
| anika k chapter 1 . 9/10/2009
My favorite part of this poem is definitely the last line. I don't know why; it just seems like a good ending and carried a lot of meaning. The rhyme scheme flowed nicely, and you avoided the pesky problem of making the rhymes seemed forced. The only thing that I found a little bit sticky was the shortness of the lines "for all to see/under the tree." When it got to that part, the flow got kind of choppy. My suggestion would be to maybe add a few words to make each line longer, or to combine them into one line separated by a comma. The other thing I found was with the line "Below skies' starry cape." I think you meant to say "sky's" instead of "skies'."Otherwise, it was an interesting, quick read that I enjoyed, despite the sad theme. Good job!