Hey, I loved this. It was wove very nicely. But you did have a few spelling errors.

In the first paragraph you state, "discover trees filled with branches that have vibrant leave(s) of different greens." you need an s at the end of leave.

Then farther down you have these sentences,

"You could just find the magic that’s there if thou dost believe, however. Is there really such a thing as magic?"

It should read: You could just find the magic that's there if thou dost believe. However, is there really such a thing as magic?

Other than that I didn't notice anything and love yur writing style, it's very descriptive without being boring. :)

this is so random, but i really liked it! your writing is pretty good! you talked about a thing a first and then another, i know you were decribing this land but you should've related it to the girl...if you get what i mean *_*

but overall, i liked it!