Reviews for Beast In The Dungeon
Wynter Storm chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
Nice, like the style of this
PopMakesMeBurpy chapter 1 . 12/12/2009
i really like this. i think it was this one that said you were open for interpretations... well, here is mine. when i read it the beast to me was love gone wrong. and the action of unlocking is could be like cheating or something. something that the person knew would unleash that which could destroy the whole relationship. i like it... i know i already said that but i really did. :D
wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 12/11/2009
Dark and condescending. I like the imagery.
All.PenNames.Must.Be.Unique chapter 1 . 11/24/2009
I really like this poem. It sounds like you're actually talking to someone, and it sort of reminds me of something that would be in a movie, or a dark book, like Lord of the Rings or something. The flow is nice and word usage is precise and fluid. I love it.
Rachel6 chapter 1 . 11/11/2009
Love it! So simple, and yet seems to possess so much meaning.

Very thought provoking!
clearspring2009 chapter 1 . 10/21/2009
I love the rhythm! It just flows when you read it out loud. Very very musical. And dark too.
East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
It reminds me of dark chocolate. That bitter but good taste (in this case feeling) You tell such a story in a short while. It conveys lots of emotions. Is this some Aussie form of poetry? (sorry I couldn't help but notice you're from down-under!
irish-ileana chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
Oh, I REALLY like this. It's quite lovely and dark.

Kind of reminds me of that little part inside that's a tiny bit crazy. The part that makes me want to lock the doors of any car I'm in so that I don't open them while it's going, you know?
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
I don't really get it in relation to your summary. I thought phrases were supposed to be repeated?

Anyway, I did like the piece. I think it was an interesting idea. I especially liked the idea of negative energy, it's ambiguous, but really works. I also liked your word choice with languish and blazing. The only thing is the third and fourth lines just seemed kinda prosey. It also seemed like unnecessary description. Ohter than that nicely done.

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Rafael Freire chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
This is good... I had to read a couple of times to figured it out lol but now that I did I like it ;)

Keep it up!

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Anna Christie chapter 1 . 10/8/2009
Hmm... I really wish I would stick to a form like you do sometimes! But, alas, I'm all free verse. haha But anyway, I like this. I'm not sure what I'd say it was about but perhaps a yearning in the heart or mind that can't be released? Or maybe I'm just weird. But there's my interpretation! :)

Anna
Mirabella chapter 1 . 9/22/2009
I like the word 'languish'. :)

This poem seems a case of curiosity killed the cat. :)

Brilliant.
OspreyEagle chapter 1 . 9/15/2009
Wow o.o cool! :D
letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 9/11/2009
It kind of reminds me of Neverwhere :)
Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 9/10/2009
This was very well written, excellent job. Do keep writing as well. Keep it Up!
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