I looooved this!

Good job. It was cute and romantic I liked it a lot.

I am rather disappointed she's a werewolf.

Nice plot! So in this story, Harry Potter, dragons, and Edward Cullen and Jacob Black all exists? Except vampires have blue eyes instead of red. Cool!

Thank you for not making her give in so easily, for making her react how most people you'd imagine would in a foreign, odd situation. It's become tiring how many fics have the person warming to the other almost instantly after the initial protest. So thanks.

Next chappie!

Hmmm. I do like short stories, and one shots...However, you should have left out the bit about the vampires. It was too much of a plot for a short story. It too easily was cancelled and wanted more.

Short stories are nice, you write it beautifully; however they require elements that are not in stories.

Um I am offended by the assumption that Witches are fictional. I'm just as real as you are.

-Tatiana, the extremely critical story critic

oh...so interesting...reading ahead...;)

Ri

I love this story! YOu did a fine job. I think I read this story twice. lol. Anyways, you did a fantastic job. I wish to read more from you in the future. Thanks for posting this story up!

Just a question, but what does "TBC" stand for? :) Just curious! :)

Peace, Love and Happiness! :)

~Bubbly Girl

Uh. Well. A few things.

First, the conflict barely manifested itself. A story needs good rising action before its climax, and I felt that your risng action was too overshadowed by the relationship between Kyra and Darick.

Secondly, what was with Darick suddenly being able to teleport? The entire final chapter confused the hell out of me - the rescue (which was a little too brief, IMO), and the wedding (which, although romantic, hadn't been discussed previously. Also, she's known him for TWO WEEKS and he never asks her if she wants to marry him, he just assumes - kinda misogynistic.).

There's nothing dreadful about your writing - although the wedding was bit cheesy - but the plot could use some work. More detail would have been appreciated.

This story was AMAZING! :) Keep up the awesome work! :)

Peace, Love and Happiness! :)

~Bubbly Girl

That is hot. ;)

Hope you write the sequel!

Great story

that was awesome:)