Reviews for Candy Apple
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
"I love you cos I think of you,"... 'cause

I'm not getting the asterisks and dots in the formatting. That just didnt make sense to me.

Not my favorite by you. I don't really understand what the it in the first line describes. Also, you don't do words.

The second stanza was sweet. I liked it.

Did you mean damn you? 'Cause damned is almost like cursed. See what in their eyes? And you get caught in something not about it and I don't even know what the it is.

I like the last stanza. I think the metaphor was really nice and interesting.

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letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 9/13/2009
I love the candy apple theme!
NocturnalNerd chapter 1 . 9/11/2009
This one confused me a bit I think because the way it was written. But I like the title, and the "You like a candy, I like an apple". Explained the title.