Reviews for Watch Over My Life |
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![]() ![]() I'm so sorry to hear about your illness! Also great to hear you perservered and managed to have your kid. I've always been a fan of this story and I'm glad you are posting it again. You are a supremely talented writer and I look forward to reading your work. Best of luck! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story, totally made me cry. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such an interesting story :O |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man, I hope she doesn't decide to go through with the pregnancy, because I feel like it probably means she will die. And Jake wouldn't want to have the baby anyways if it means that she dies. :/ |
![]() ![]() ![]() I Love this story! Keep up the updates!(: |
![]() ![]() Please put second part up! Love Jess and Jake. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've read the 14 chapters that you have up on here and i am dying to know what happens next aha. You have a fantastic style of writing and oh my god, wow, the sexual tension between Jessica and Jake. I was wondering if you were going to put up the rest of the story again? I just really want to know what happens next :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() HOLY SHIT I miss this story! I just found it after searching for it for ages and what a treat. it was such an incredible pleasure to reread this one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, there. This seems like an interesting story. I have to admit, Jess is pretty tough to be willing to stay there when she found out that Jake also worked there. I probably would have tried to find another job. Anyways, the main thing I was not found of in this story was that I found that things were not connected plot wise very well. You introduce backstories in one chapter, with no suggestion of the backstory beforehand, and then completly forget about it after the chapter. Examples of this is Jess' relationship with Rob. This subplot was not even hinted at before, which makes me think that it was not planned and were made up on the spot. And after the chapter where they were used, they were never mentioned again. Another example is how Jake stood her up when they were younger. I know that this is mentioned mainly to describe Jake's character, but Jessica never even brought it up with him after that. Also I feel like Jess' and Jake's relationship moved really fast. Jessica went from down right hating him to admitting to herself that she cared about him really quickly. It is also quite topsy turvey if you know what I mean. Characters develop and then in the next chapter all of the development is gone. Why does Jake hook up with Ciara for a week after he and Jess become closer? And why does Sharon not get mad at him for it? Also I feel like although Jake has told Jess that she has problems letting people in, she's actually kind of open. At least to me. Wow I sounded mean there. But I figured I'd tell you honestly what I thought of it and try to help you improove. All in all this is a really good story, it just doesn't flow that well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVE IT, absolutely love it! Love the way you write~ and talk about sexual tension haha! God, Jake sounds hot! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really hope you decide to update again soon, I really love this story :) |
![]() ![]() Glad to see an update to this story.. I love where this is going! Can't wait to read more |
![]() ![]() hope this story doesn't go by unfinished.. it was a great find and hope it continues |
![]() ![]() ![]() great story! update soon! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() ugh, soooo good, hope you update soon! |