Reviews for Winning Aylee Ruan's Heart
heal me forever chapter 1 . 10/29/2012
it shuld have been more u know including d date also neverless good one
Littlemslulu chapter 1 . 8/21/2012
That's it? Ughhhh... I want more! It would be interesting though to read the whole story about these characters, what makes Jace falls for Ailee badly.
SwimmingThroughExistance chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
wow! a sequel please! it was really very well-written!
subtly.obvious chapter 1 . 11/28/2011
haha aww this is so CUTE!

I love it :D

I remember finding a couple of spelling/grammar errors while reading it but i can't remember now.

Keep writing please! I love your stories. :D
Miss Master chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
Cute. Too cute. :)
InkWitch chapter 1 . 3/19/2011
easily the most cutest (ignore the grammar mistake) and realest high-school romance I've ever read. no sign of a cliche so thank you very much! I love this story a lot FULLSTOP.

:)

You are welcome :)
Persnickety Fox chapter 1 . 12/10/2010
There was one grammatical error I picked out right away; "He was suppose to know" should be "he was supposed to know." I'll let you find the rest.

I liked how you explained the heroine's reason for not wanting a relationship. She made for a unique and realistic character. But I don't see why she would step out onto her balcony if she was still changing. The fan service seemed unnecessary. There are other ways for Jace to blank out on his speech.

Jace's pursuit and constant rejections were entertaining, but the ending I think didn't do Aylee's character justice. She had been built up to be so pessimistic about relationships. I'd have liked to see a more subtle change than going from refusing strongly to agreeing. Like, instead of saying, "I am hungry," maybe she could say "Ask me tomorrow." That way, Aylee shows that she's still skeptical about love, but she's considering it and it would still give Jace hope.

But that's just my preference. Otherwise, I'd like to read more of your work in the future.
Ngoc1231 chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
Aw, so cute! And I love the last line. And wow.. I hope they work out. It would be so sad that he worked that hard to get no where. Although at least he did get one date out of her.

Love the story!

*Ngoc1231*
jennycraig10 chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
Cute one shot and the characters were adorable. A possible suggestions: maybe try a different ending. It felt too abrupt for me and while I know oneshots are supposed to keep you wanting more and stuff, it was just really jarring how you ended it.

Overall though, nice job!
SpasticLittleGirl chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
OMG THIS IS SO CUTE! But it is SO not a one-shot! Please put in another chapter? PWEASE? PWETTY PWEASE? - puppy dog eyes-

YOU CAN NOT JUST LEAVE IT THERE. I WANT TO KNOW HOW IT GOES.

Maybe another one-shot (well it wouldn't really be a one-shot but meh...) about them in a year's time? Or their first breakup/makeup? PLEASE? They're really cute :)
anitsirK chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Oh I like this. I like the promise your ending has. :) Keep writing.
x Farii chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
Short and cuute x]]
browneyedcolly chapter 1 . 3/1/2010
best. oneshot. ever.
TravelingMiko chapter 1 . 10/1/2009
I love your writing style and how you didn't end this oneshot with stupidity and something corny. This was an subtle short story. A very nice read. Keep up the good work.
KMx0x chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
Super cutee. (:

I only found one mistake that someone hasn't said yet:

"Jace yawned slightly, feeling sleeping."

Second section, eighth paragraph.

Loved the One-Shot.

-Kiara
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