can you make a sequel?

it shuld have been more u know including d date also neverless good one

That's it? Ughhhh... I want more! It would be interesting though to read the whole story about these characters, what makes Jace falls for Ailee badly.

wow! a sequel please! it was really very well-written!

haha aww this is so CUTE!

I love it :D

I remember finding a couple of spelling/grammar errors while reading it but i can't remember now.

Keep writing please! I love your stories. :D

Cute. Too cute. :)

easily the most cutest (ignore the grammar mistake) and realest high-school romance I've ever read. no sign of a cliche so thank you very much! I love this story a lot FULLSTOP.

:)

You are welcome :)

There was one grammatical error I picked out right away; "He was suppose to know" should be "he was supposed to know." I'll let you find the rest.

I liked how you explained the heroine's reason for not wanting a relationship. She made for a unique and realistic character. But I don't see why she would step out onto her balcony if she was still changing. The fan service seemed unnecessary. There are other ways for Jace to blank out on his speech.

Jace's pursuit and constant rejections were entertaining, but the ending I think didn't do Aylee's character justice. She had been built up to be so pessimistic about relationships. I'd have liked to see a more subtle change than going from refusing strongly to agreeing. Like, instead of saying, "I am hungry," maybe she could say "Ask me tomorrow." That way, Aylee shows that she's still skeptical about love, but she's considering it and it would still give Jace hope.

But that's just my preference. Otherwise, I'd like to read more of your work in the future.

Aw, so cute! And I love the last line. And wow.. I hope they work out. It would be so sad that he worked that hard to get no where. Although at least he did get one date out of her.

Love the story!

~*~Ngoc1231~*~

Cute one shot and the characters were adorable. A possible suggestions: maybe try a different ending. It felt too abrupt for me and while I know oneshots are supposed to keep you wanting more and stuff, it was just really jarring how you ended it.

Overall though, nice job!

OMG THIS IS SO CUTE! But it is SO not a one-shot! Please put in another chapter? PWEASE? PWETTY PWEASE? - puppy dog eyes-

YOU CAN NOT JUST LEAVE IT THERE. I WANT TO KNOW HOW IT GOES.

Maybe another one-shot (well it wouldn't really be a one-shot but meh...) about them in a year's time? Or their first breakup/makeup? PLEASE? They're really cute :)

Oh I like this. I like the promise your ending has. :) Keep writing.

Short and cuute x]]

best. oneshot. ever.

I love your writing style and how you didn't end this oneshot with stupidity and something corny. This was an subtle short story. A very nice read. Keep up the good work.