Lol. I'm currently getting back on track with my writing, with improved grammar, and minor punctuation errors. However I'm working on a new novel which I shall be publishing on this website within this month. I am greatful for the love everyone has shown to my characters. Every comment positive and negative has inspired me to keep creating magical worlds that draw you in to the lives of others. Since this story means so much to me, I have decided to finish it. But in order to do that I will have to redo the entire story, fixing grammar, and putting more detail and history with the characters. I have attempted to finish this story many times but I haven't been in the right place to ever do it. But i am back and I'm ready to dive back into the world of Zander and Clarissa. I'm so excited to watch this love grow again, however this story will not be redone or in progress until my newest story is finished. Its the only way I can gaurentee that any of my latest stories be completed, by taking it one story at a time. So please watch out for my new novel and review. Thank you all ! :)

Hiiiii!
Just trying to revert your attention back to this amazing book again.

Hey! I've really been enjoying this! :D
Great plot although Grammer isn't too good. You need to start a new line for each different person talking :)
Update!

I will be honest, I didn't read the whole story. I read up to chapter three and then skimmed through the rest to see if it got any better, and sadly, it did not. I don't mean this in a discouraging manner, since I feel like you actually have a good plot and general storyline but your complete dismissal of English grammar and writing techniques have killed it. I would suggest a beta, a VERY GOOD beta because you need more than minor help. And apologizing at the end of the chapter for mistakes does not make up for how horrid the grammar is. I make mistakes in my own writing, but in general, I am conscientious of grammar and spelling. Most mistakes are excusable if they are common or typos. Your mistakes show a disregard for the rules.

Maybe this is a pet peeve, but you completely misuse parenthesis. You use it to go into greater detail and, frankly, you should not. You also misuse commas and, for the first time I have EVER seen, periods. How do you misuse the period? I don't know if you even care about actual writing techniques _ . My point is, I suppose, that your story (which has an interesting storyline) is utterly ruined by atrocious grammar and formatting.

KNH

My favorite part of this chapter is the ending. I think the beginning needs more work but I like the story. I hope you are not to upset at what I said.

so when did she get the bullet?

I like the concept, but you need to get a beta. Please.

LOLOLOLOL. The ending!

"I'M HAVING SEX! SEX! OMG!"

I love you.

I sound creepy now. -.-

anyways.

update soon?

I really can't put this nicely so I'm just going to say it bluntly.

This chapter was horribly confusing and filled with so many grammatical and spelling errors that I was completely turned off. The content was okay, but the execution was terrible. Things like "he took a breathe" instead of "he took a breath" or saying "too" instead of "to" were all OVER the chapter and it REALLY took away from the content.

And it is SUPER CONFUSING to read because you have two people talking in the same line. Whenever a new person speaks you should start a new line so that the reader understands that someone new is speaking.

I like this story but honestly it's getting too confusing and annoying to read. I would highly suggest getting a beta reader if you are unable to correct your own chapters.

can't wait for the next chapter

OMG! Love the story, especially this chapter:D:D So is this scene going to be continued in the next chapter? I would really love to know what their first time was like, especially since they're so cute together:p Please UPDATE SOON!

awesome chapter :D i like the last line very amusing, please update soon i cant wait for the next chapter XD

SWET

this story is awesome so far please update soon XD

i like this so far and i will make the time to read the rest of it.