Reviews for Sofie, 3
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
This is bitter and regretful, sad and angry. All these emotions work perfectly together, and I think the combination of casual language ("And yeah: I am using pratfall words") combined with all these hugely intellectual phrases ("Would the abject denizens dress my/Jipped, cuckled shoulder") really helps with the idea that your mind is lost without her, you're just going off the deep end and ranting more than anything else here. Of course, that's just my interpretation. I love the lines, "There is/Fresh meat on the floor." It's haunting and packs more of a punch to me than some of those elaborate phrases from earlier in the poem. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
Isca chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
"I am making a conscious decision to never get over you." This is a very interesting opening line. Is the speaker 'staying in love' with this woman because he truly has feelings for her or because he wants to 'prove' to himself that he's 'strong-willed'?

"Let's talk about this lunacy." Hah. What a great/comedic line.

"There is fresh meat on the floor." Fascinating imagery and story implications.