Reviews for Smile
crocodile chapter 1 . 9/16/2009
how interesting! the rhyme and rhythm were both quite catchy. the line, "Eyes that never taste the breeze," is a provoking image. the last 5 lines seem to change the style a little, and i didn't like 'mend' with 'break,' 'snap,' or 'bend,' but who cares! ending a poem is so hard sometimes. this was flowing and creepy; great overall!