|Reviews for Summer in New Orleans|
| Grasping Insanity chapter 1 . 9/19/2009
This is kind of confusing, Noiz is a cat? Or a person? Or a cat person? Also you need to use correct grammer when people are talking.
"Ah, ah, ah!" she said aloud. "No attacking the caretaker! Still a little weak from the GHB, I see. Just stay down for a while and youll be fine!" Noiz glared at her coldly.
"You cant do this to me, you hussy!" she hissed at her.
"I just did", Lou replied.
"I could have you fired and arrested for this!" Noiz cried out again.
you may also want to describe your characters and the background information again before just jumping right into a story cuz it makes things a little harder to get and it will eventually give you problems. If you need an example you can check out my newest story, Hinding in the Shadows, I dont like my other ones (Well, Aurora and Nights of a Lunar Eclipse are ok but the first one I listed is the best and my others are just horrible) good luck with your story!