Before the blood and the stitches and the ... deatt Elle had been of little importance in the whole universe of things. She had been given a birhtdate, printed down in cold stoic letters for her Social Security card and then unknowingly, she had been given a death date as well.

That death date, of course, was given to a Reaper the day before. He had stared at it with questionable distain for he really did not like his occupation, not that he had been given much choice in the matter.

Making deaths with one of the known gods, death, was never a wise discisiou, and that was how he found himself here. In the mists of the plane inbetween, swearing at his death book because, quite simply... it was being a little bastard.

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Start with the star description with the want for love...

It is questionable the thoughts people have the die that they die. Oh sure ,there are the thoughts right before you fall into the questionable abiss like:

'I regret nothing ... except right now because dying is really inconvient.'

'Damn you Twinky.'

The ever popular, 'Fuck'

And the all time favorite, 'Whats the worst that could happen?'

And those can be really entertaining. In fact, it was rumored that Lincolns ghost had taken up a fine collection of death quotes and published them for his dead brethren to read, but that is just here say ... some say it had been Booth that had done it.

Regardless, it can be discerned that Elle's last thoughts would probably be somewhere around the 'fuck' category because being chopped up probably had nothing to do with a twinky, but ... you would be wrong.

It is said that death plays favor to know soul, unless they can best him in a game if they think to ask for a dual before dying, and he certianly would not take pity on a girl's who last thougths were...

"I never got to love.'

Your title threw me off. I was expecting bubblegum zombies from the get go, haha. But it is a good way to reel in readers.

I really enjoyed how you came up with a couple of ideas as to what Elle imagined she might have been. It really shows her character depth, something that it's always easy for a lot of writers to show as smoothly as you did.

I also really enjoyed the flow of your story. There wasn't any dialogue but you didn't need it. The tone of want and an underlining desperation was present. I think you conveyed her feelings wonderfully.

I really look forward to another chapter from you. Great job :]

u cant just end a chapter like that... well hurry up and post the next chapter kay sis

wel i cant write worth a crap so i leave it to u wanda ... i loved it and cant wait to read the next chapter..

I really liked this chapter. The descriptions were great. The whole bit with the "b-grade" movie was pretty funny. I'm a huge fan of sci-fi, so I instantly had a mental image of the mansion you were describing. Awesome work! Can't wait to read more. :)

A nice start to it. :D

I searched up zombie and I got tricked into reading something without shotguns.

It has a great voice, even though the actual premise hasn't been touched yet (plenty of time), and a quirky sense of humor. The only real down thing that I've picked up is that I probably wouldn't try to keep referring to a character by her race.

But that's just me! I'm curious to see how this continues, so I guess that's the best thing someone can hope for!